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Array ( [sid] => 47221 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Black Clouds [time] => 2004-05-12 16:23:35 [hometext] => I wrote this poem as a personal experience of what i've been through before. I'm sure at least a few people can relate to the feeling. [bodytext] => Black clouds of confusion fill my mind,
As the cold sharp knife begins to grind,
Memories of lies come crawling back,
The control is what I lack,
I grit my teeth as the blade repeats the same line,
Blood drips gently nows that's a good sign,
Laying down and breathing deep,
Letting the blood run as I fall asleep,
Trying to think positive and stop what's happening,
But how can I when life is just one big negative thing,
I stop and slide the blood off the blade,
Hoping soon enough the black clouds will fade,
Stinging and pricking pain I feel inside,
Now my friend are you glad you told me you lied?,
Satisfaction I feel as the emotional pain is replaced with physical,
But then I realise who's really been the great big fool. [comments] => 6 [counter] => 192 [topic] => 48 [informant] => XxPerfectlySanexX [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 16 [ratings] => 4 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => EmotionalPoetry )
Black Clouds

Contributed by XxPerfectlySanexX on Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 04:23:35 PM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry



Black clouds of confusion fill my mind,
As the cold sharp knife begins to grind,
Memories of lies come crawling back,
The control is what I lack,
I grit my teeth as the blade repeats the same line,
Blood drips gently nows that's a good sign,
Laying down and breathing deep,
Letting the blood run as I fall asleep,
Trying to think positive and stop what's happening,
But how can I when life is just one big negative thing,
I stop and slide the blood off the blade,
Hoping soon enough the black clouds will fade,
Stinging and pricking pain I feel inside,
Now my friend are you glad you told me you lied?,
Satisfaction I feel as the emotional pain is replaced with physical,
But then I realise who's really been the great big fool.




Copyright © XxPerfectlySanexX ... [ 2004-05-12 16:23:35]
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Re: Black Clouds (User Rating: 1 )
by lil_angel on Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 04:26:14 PM AEST
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This is an excellent write!


Re: Black Clouds (User Rating: 1 )
by burdened on Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 04:33:06 PM AEST
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i know exactly how you feel.

*nods*
beautiful write.
you captured the moment.


Re: Black Clouds (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 05:04:26 PM AEST
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powerful poem, excellent expression of feelings, hugs n' love nessa

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Re: Black Clouds (User Rating: 1 )
by honeyrain on Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 05:06:53 PM AEST
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Im really lovin your poems .you need to help me wit mine.yea i an relate i tried to do the same before.

Favorite linez:

Memories of lies come crawling back,
The control is what I lack,
I grit my teeth as the blade repeats the same line,
Blood drips gently nows that's a good sign,
Laying down and breathing deep,
Letting the blood run as I fall asleep,
Trying to think positive and stop what's happening,
But how can I when life is just one big negative thing,

*I would have put the whole poem as my favorite line but i couldn't


Re: Black Clouds (User Rating: 1 )
by bite_me on Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 08:32:14 PM AEST
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wow these are really good, i know jus how you feel!

Ella

xXx


Re: Black Clouds (User Rating: 1 )
by NirvanaLotus on Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 07:14:01 PM AEST
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wow very beutiful, i love the feeling you have in it. i can easily relate to this. *hugs* cutting is the crappiest addiction of all




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