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You make me Fly
Wen i take you in
I swallow all your love
And wait for it to begin

The colours of
Dark maths in my head
Blood in my hands
Gazing From beneath water
I close my eyes and sin

In the wrestling-ring
of my ***** mind
The voices fight:
Emerge
No stay deep
Youre a ***** *****
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Fight beneath water

Contributed by ruby1987 on Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 08:00:43 AM in AEST
Topic: Suicide

I talk to you
You make me Fly
Wen i take you in
I swallow all your love
And wait for it to begin

The colours of
Dark maths in my head
Blood in my hands
Gazing From beneath water
I close my eyes and sin

In the wrestling-ring
of my ***** mind
The voices fight:
Emerge
No stay deep
Youre a ***** *****

Copyright © ruby1987 ... [ 2004-05-11 08:00:43]
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Re: Fight beneath water (User Rating: 1 )
by Hurretje on Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 08:08:00 AM AEST
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Haunting and scraping! Good write....
Greetz,
Hur

Re: Fight beneath water (User Rating: 1 )
by deathdrop on Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 08:19:33 AM AEST
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you're right. this is weird. but its also good so that doesn't matter. i like your style here. kep up the good work!

Re: Fight beneath water (User Rating: 1 )
by loopylou on Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 08:39:21 AM AEST
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i like this alot its a great way of releasing anger. maybe you could make it longer witha explanation though or replace the swearing??.

Re: Fight beneath water (User Rating: 1 )
by bluoreo on Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 08:52:32 AM AEST
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It is weird. But in a very good way. It had a great tone to it. Very good.
-eric

Re: Fight beneath water (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 01:13:21 PM AEST
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Sounds as if you are drowning in self pity on this one. Well done I might add! I would say deep...not weird.
Angel always...godspeed...joni

Re: Fight beneath water (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 09:51:09 AM AEST
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weird and wonderful, liked it!

wildejohnny.

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