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Array ( [sid] => 45865 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Road Out, Or Road In. [time] => 2004-05-02 11:55:31 [hometext] => This One's For Archie. [bodytext] => I am sort of getting help.
If I choose the road to get out.
If I don’t fall, before I say ‘yes’.
If I wake from my broken mess.

I know its something, I have to do.
But my iced world is delicate.
I don’t want it broken too!

I have to find the keys,
When, I don’t know where they are!
I’m confused coz things are spinning.
They stole for a laugh.

What does that make me?
To have been there with them.
Then to lay their marks else where,
They gob their smokers Flem.

What do I think?
To go round with them?
I know that they’re trouble.
I just want to fit in!!

And with the help,
I’m not sure where it goes.
Because darkness is my shadow.
Of a bitter rose.

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Road Out, Or Road In.

Contributed by deathdrop on Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 11:55:31 AM in AEST
Topic: Lifepoems

I am sort of getting help.
If I choose the road to get out.
If I don’t fall, before I say ‘yes’.
If I wake from my broken mess.

I know its something, I have to do.
But my iced world is delicate.
I don’t want it broken too!

I have to find the keys,
When, I don’t know where they are!
I’m confused coz things are spinning.
They stole for a laugh.

What does that make me?
To have been there with them.
Then to lay their marks else where,
They gob their smokers Flem.

What do I think?
To go round with them?
I know that they’re trouble.
I just want to fit in!!

And with the help,
I’m not sure where it goes.
Because darkness is my shadow.
Of a bitter rose.

Copyright © deathdrop ... [ 2004-05-02 11:55:31]
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Re: Road Out, Or Road In. (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 12:13:48 PM AEST
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Ouch. Not great choices here.

I really liked the poem...except for the last two lines. The poem used realistic imagery throughout, but the last lines went to imaginative imagery. I believe the poem would have been stronger if it highlighted the quandary of the decision: fit in and hang live with the "wrongness" feeling of hanging with criminals, or walk away to a world without friends. Ending in a word picture of a dark soul just didn't seem to fit.

Overall though, I liked the realistic imagery and feeling of the poem, and the choices presented for the poem's character--I think the poem is a very worthwhile read.

Re: Road Out, Or Road In. (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 12:18:00 PM AEST
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awesome job

Michelle

Re: Road Out, Or Road In. (User Rating: 1 )
by Archie on Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 02:42:51 PM AEST
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I left a comment in your journal saying all I wanted to say. If you ever need to talk or vent send me a message. I'm here to help O.K.?
Your friend archie

P.S. I put a poem on the internet because of you talking about the tough choices a person has to make when they have no one to turn to. It is called "As close as I have been" I truly hope things get better for you. Your friend --Archie

Re: Road Out, Or Road In. (User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 08:37:14 PM AEST
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good. has potential.

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