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[aid] => mick
[title] => The Weeping Winds
[time] => 2004-04-30 04:53:54
[hometext] => A somewhat haunting metaphor, detailing just how hard life can slap you in the face.
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A forlorn soul, sad cries ignored
To barren skies, a wish implored
A splintered heart again to fail
Swept away in cruelty's gale
Such sullen stride, on streets devoid
Past fallen trees, by wind destroyed
A brumal gust stings heart distressed
Tears break apart in sharp tempest
Onerous desire never satiated
Crystalline spirit forever glaciated
Glass shards reflect what has become
In fierce mistral eyes are left numb
Snowfall begins in flurries white
This diamond dust, these whirls of blight
Levanter grasps, hopes it doth reap
In storm's eye calm, alone to weep
Frostbitten rasp, grievous deluge
Ice tinges air with centrifuge
Unyielding avarice, from heaven exscind
Resolute prayer answered with a bitter cold wind
Scattered about, no tears shall keep
In piercing gale, alone to weep
[comments] => 17
[counter] => 348
[topic] => 48
[informant] => Vitreous_Soul
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
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[score] => 57
[ratings] => 13
[editpoem] => 1
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The Weeping Winds
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
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Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 04:53:54 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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A forlorn soul, sad cries ignored
To barren skies, a wish implored
A splintered heart again to fail
Swept away in cruelty's gale
Such sullen stride, on streets devoid
Past fallen trees, by wind destroyed
A brumal gust stings heart distressed
Tears break apart in sharp tempest
Onerous desire never satiated
Crystalline spirit forever glaciated
Glass shards reflect what has become
In fierce mistral eyes are left numb
Snowfall begins in flurries white
This diamond dust, these whirls of blight
Levanter grasps, hopes it doth reap
In storm's eye calm, alone to weep
Frostbitten rasp, grievous deluge
Ice tinges air with centrifuge
Unyielding avarice, from heaven exscind
Resolute prayer answered with a bitter cold wind
Scattered about, no tears shall keep
In piercing gale, alone to weep
Copyright ©
Vitreous_Soul
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 05:07:59 AM AEST
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Friend, this is extravagantly evocative. This line I found particularly scintillating;
"Crystalline spirit forever glaciated"
Almost perfect in rhythm, this more than makes up for it in vision and piercing vocality.
Sterlingly laudable work.
Again - your pain is our gain.
Vastly appreciated. |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by venkat on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 05:17:56 AM AEST
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| Excellent work..immensely packed with powerful imagery...welldone..venkat |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by forever_lonely on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 05:54:29 AM AEST
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Intense, truely powerful, inspirational, any word in the worlds dictionaries meaning strong powerful and amazing really
Once again my jaw is broken as it smashes into and through the floor breaking every tooth and bone in my jaw area, :O
Truely another masterpiece
Luke |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by Stitch on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 05:55:37 AM AEST
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I love what you do with words.
"Diamond dust" and "Crystalline spirit" are among my favorites. Another fantastic write.
Keep em coming.
Stitch |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by poetrygodslove on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 07:41:02 AM AEST
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| awe powerful. will remember this poem when the wind blows. great write. sandy. |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by Kie on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 07:50:55 AM AEST
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North winds always blow cold and they bring painful storms. Yet they do pass when southwesterly winds blow in warmth, smiles and contentment.
Your poem was beautiful and it cried out in sorrow and pain. You paint vivid imagery and your use of words always impresses me.
But one day the winds won't weep and you'll lie in a hammock and write love poetry beneath blue skies.
It will happen...
Kie |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 11:53:57 AM AEST
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from title to centrifuge of icy air i was sitting here captivated, this is sooo the mood i am in, exquisite poem, your best by far my new favorite, keep 'em comin' hugs n' love nessa
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 04:24:23 PM AEST
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Wow, VS... This is phenominal. I feel a little priveldged though that I got to hear this before anyone else got to read it! Bravo! You have definitely outdone yourself! Loved it!
Lindsey |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by shanarah on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 06:50:15 PM AEST
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This is absolutely amazing writing...good job!
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by arden on
Saturday, 1st May 2004 @ 07:45:45 AM AEST
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a wonderful use of words.
a very powerful poem.
beautiful imagery. perfect rhyme.
i could spend alot of time praiseing this poem.
loved this.
well done.
Arden |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 07:52:23 AM AEST
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My friend, I have felt this so many times in life. This write disturbs me because it so perfectly depicts just how it feels. You use of words is always great, but in this one I think you truly out did yourself.
A masterpiece of agony
Forget it barkeep, I'm gonna get him a keg.
Larry |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by Stitch on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 08:49:26 AM AEST
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Heartbreaking and beautiful. So heartfelt and real. I gotta know the story behind this.
Stitch |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by blueheart on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 08:54:37 PM AEST
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| Excellent poem with great usage of words. |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by JennyFruFru on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 12:36:34 AM AEST
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| wonderfully done... def. makes me a fan of your work :) :) :) |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 8th May 2004 @ 01:12:22 AM AEST
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So what have you been doing with yourself VS while I was away? Still the Word Master of the day!
This is so forlorn and lamenting, I hope it's not really happening to you.....for not too long ago.....You were writing of gentleness and amour!
Great Write VS.
Love you
consue |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by DreamWeaver on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 06:05:26 AM AEST
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| How perfectly you depict the cry of a soul that has been hurt badly ... how much I relate to this poem is scary ... words that stab deeply, but written with beauty - your trademark ... Jan |
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Re: The Weeping Winds
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by Archie on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 07:17:20 PM AEST
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| Wow, This is an awesome poem. you are practiced and very talented |
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