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[aid] => mick
[title] => One More Day
[time] => 2004-04-28 15:45:47
[hometext] =>
[bodytext] => Another day wasted at school
Not able to work, I play the fool
You say you're mine, but is it true
I got ****** over once, lets not make it two
I wanted you, you wanted her
Never did understand why you weren't sure
You say it's done, it's gone, it's over
But I find myself leaning further away from your shoulder
Four years now I've been writing these rhymes
About you, about him, about all kinds
With him it was abuse, heartache, pain
About cutting, fun, and all the games
Not caring, being high, being depressed
And these rhymes yet have feelings to supress
About sex, about you, aobut us and love
But somehow these rhymes aren't filling enough
To hide the pain and fill the hole
To burry the issues that trouble my soul
Now I find old habits coming back
And I can't fix what I know I lack
I've been high, I've been drunk, and I still overdose
These activities cover what I don't want to know
Sobriety sucks, I just want to go away
And not have to face things for just one more day
Zyprexa's a ***** when you take too much
But even then it's still not enough
The tension, the sleeping, hitting the walls
It knocks you out and further you fall
I've experienced this one too many times
And it takes three days for me to be fine
Now six months I've spent with you
Still questioning if this all is true
My habits destructive , a troublesome mind
But **** it, this life was never mine
I'll take five instead of four of these pills
Maybe I'll feel death instead of ill
Seventeen years wasted away
Walking away with nothing to say
Don't ask questions and don't sympathize
I never took what wasn't mine
I've cried my tears and shed my blood
This life, your love was never enough
You are my dear, the one I love
But I can't stay, it's all too much
Think of me and the wisdom I gave
Maybe I'll stop for just one more day.
[comments] => 13
[counter] => 440
[topic] => 36
[informant] => CuttersAngel
[notes] => .....Edited by mod_6 for language...28-04-04
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[score] => 19
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Suicide
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One More Day
Contributed by
CuttersAngel
on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 03:45:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Another day wasted at school
Not able to work, I play the fool
You say you're mine, but is it true
I got ****** over once, lets not make it two
I wanted you, you wanted her
Never did understand why you weren't sure
You say it's done, it's gone, it's over
But I find myself leaning further away from your shoulder
Four years now I've been writing these rhymes
About you, about him, about all kinds
With him it was abuse, heartache, pain
About cutting, fun, and all the games
Not caring, being high, being depressed
And these rhymes yet have feelings to supress
About sex, about you, aobut us and love
But somehow these rhymes aren't filling enough
To hide the pain and fill the hole
To burry the issues that trouble my soul
Now I find old habits coming back
And I can't fix what I know I lack
I've been high, I've been drunk, and I still overdose
These activities cover what I don't want to know
Sobriety sucks, I just want to go away
And not have to face things for just one more day
Zyprexa's a ***** when you take too much
But even then it's still not enough
The tension, the sleeping, hitting the walls
It knocks you out and further you fall
I've experienced this one too many times
And it takes three days for me to be fine
Now six months I've spent with you
Still questioning if this all is true
My habits destructive , a troublesome mind
But **** it, this life was never mine
I'll take five instead of four of these pills
Maybe I'll feel death instead of ill
Seventeen years wasted away
Walking away with nothing to say
Don't ask questions and don't sympathize
I never took what wasn't mine
I've cried my tears and shed my blood
This life, your love was never enough
You are my dear, the one I love
But I can't stay, it's all too much
Think of me and the wisdom I gave
Maybe I'll stop for just one more day.
Copyright ©
CuttersAngel
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2004-04-28 15:45:47]
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Re: One More Day
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by sicknivesevered on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 03:56:03 PM AEST
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| Ahh.... the sheer format of this poem is enough to grant it my blessing. It was so easy to read; everything flowed so well. Plus the the connection factor brings it into its own. Grooviness. |
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Re: One More Day
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by PottyPoet on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 03:56:40 PM AEST
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This is fantastic. I was so sad after I finished reading this poem. What an after effect- really leaves you thinking. I love this and can't wait for more.
*Li* |
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Re: One More Day
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 03:56:53 PM AEST
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I know a person who feels just like you. Like the world is hell, her ex a whore she still feels for and her parents miseralble B***hs. I'm going to tell you the same thing i try to get in to her head. Someone loves you. It's not the b*****d of a guy your dating but it's your friends. Your death will sadden someone. Chear up! Hope to you!
Best wishes and good luck
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Re: One More Day
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by wyrd_faerie on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 03:57:05 PM AEST
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| wow...this is amazing...please hold on, if you can write like this there must be something huge planned for you... |
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Re: One More Day
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 03:58:07 PM AEST
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I know a person who feels just like you. Like the world is hell, her ex a wh**e she still feels for and her parents miseralble b***hs. I'm going to tell you the same thing I try to get in to her head each day. Someone loves you. It's not the b*****d of a guy your dating but it's your friends. Your death will sadden someone. Chear up! Hope to you!
Best wishes and good luck
^_^ |
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Re: One More Day
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by Rhei76 on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 04:05:10 PM AEST
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| Sadly capturing, Taking emotions that once live inside me. Remem'oring Days I'm glad I left. I feel for you, and I send out prayers for you. God bless. Beautiful writing. |
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Re: One More Day
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by Black13 on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 04:11:32 PM AEST
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Wow, this was absolutely amazing. So very sad and depressing.
The style of writing is superb. |
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Re: One More Day
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by xoblondiebabix3 on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 05:16:54 PM AEST
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This was just awesome.. excellent write
~*xObeaOx*~ |
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Re: One More Day
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by heart_breaker on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 05:40:21 PM AEST
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wow im totally taken away by ur words..
this is crazy but i actually felt the pain from the words.. writing is in u and u should never
give up on life.. Brandy |
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Re: One More Day
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by AmaNdAsHepArD on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 10:51:15 AM AEST
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i dont think i can find the words to express what i feel when i read this poem but............WOW! you did a great job...........keep it up
**vamp** |
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Re: One More Day
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 05:09:25 PM AEST
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This was a great poem Cilla... I'll say this one last time that you HAVE TO get a way from this guy he does not deserve you one bit he seems to have nothing to offer you but pain. Get away from him for your own good.
You know who this is...
From someone that cares about you deeply |
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Re: One More Day
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by Xbxg32000 on
Monday, 2nd July 2007 @ 07:24:09 AM AEST
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I enjoyed reading this poem, it tells a story in a unique way. I would like to point out some typos if you don't mind:
"And these rhymes yet have feelings to supress"
Supress should be spelled suppress here.
"To burry the issues that trouble my soul"
Burry should be "bury" here if you are trying to like cover something as in burying a body.
"About sex, about you, aobut us and love"
I think the second about was a typo here.
That's about it! Once again, nicely written, keep it up :]. |
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Re: One More Day
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by 143 on
Wednesday, 17th December 2008 @ 11:13:30 PM AEST
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MASTERFUL,EXPRESSING, UNREAL!!
I fully, fully can feel your pain..
It's only everyday, That it rains,So screw the tears, And all the jokes, Open another beer, With the blokes, Tomm is another, day to learn, Seek not from me, But what you have learned, Life on strong, and yet to strive, remember you have kids, and that's a mommys pride. |
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