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Array ( [sid] => 45093 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => So Long [time] => 2004-04-27 15:09:39 [hometext] => the beautiful mess, where life and death collide. [bodytext] => in distance
in duress
in damage
in disdain
in demise...
comes fortune
comes favor
comes fragrance
comes future
comes the flies...
then calmings
then callings
then classes
then crosshairs
then cries...
find substance
find surface
find sentries
find sickness
find surprise...

it's not the same as before
and i won't be held around still
i suppose.
though you may want a little more
there's nothing left i can kill
you know.
on the surface lay the sores
underneath the blood won't chill
like those.
no it's different than before
leave me to ache on this hill
let me go.

with fervency and no aim:
where are the particulars?
they're gone.
feign dependency all the same
snapshots of more pictures?
so long.

so long it's been since i've held you.
so long to everything else...
so long as they tell you
that

in distance kept
in duress claimed
in damage quoted
in disdain quelled
in demise...
comes fortune
comes favor
comes fragrance
comes future
comes the flies...
then calmings abound
then callings afront
then classes adjourn
then crosshairs arrange
then cries...
find substance
find surface
find sentries
find sickness
find surprise...

while i'm wishing
while i'm waiting
with each wonder
coming asunder
i'll face a smile
every good awhile
then remember
every blunder [comments] => 5 [counter] => 206 [topic] => 13 [informant] => remy [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 10 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )
So Long

Contributed by remy on Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 03:09:39 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry



in distance
in duress
in damage
in disdain
in demise...
comes fortune
comes favor
comes fragrance
comes future
comes the flies...
then calmings
then callings
then classes
then crosshairs
then cries...
find substance
find surface
find sentries
find sickness
find surprise...

it's not the same as before
and i won't be held around still
i suppose.
though you may want a little more
there's nothing left i can kill
you know.
on the surface lay the sores
underneath the blood won't chill
like those.
no it's different than before
leave me to ache on this hill
let me go.

with fervency and no aim:
where are the particulars?
they're gone.
feign dependency all the same
snapshots of more pictures?
so long.

so long it's been since i've held you.
so long to everything else...
so long as they tell you
that

in distance kept
in duress claimed
in damage quoted
in disdain quelled
in demise...
comes fortune
comes favor
comes fragrance
comes future
comes the flies...
then calmings abound
then callings afront
then classes adjourn
then crosshairs arrange
then cries...
find substance
find surface
find sentries
find sickness
find surprise...

while i'm wishing
while i'm waiting
with each wonder
coming asunder
i'll face a smile
every good awhile
then remember
every blunder




Copyright © remy ... [ 2004-04-27 15:09:39]
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Re: So Long (User Rating: 1 )
by Daniela_Maria_Violin on Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 03:21:48 PM AEST
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awww... I love how you did this --
but it's so sad.

--

Face the smile, forget the blunder
It only has power to put you under.
A smile can bring the best out of life
So take the smile, forget the strife ;)

Dani





Re: So Long (User Rating: 1 )
by Kie on Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 04:52:33 PM AEST
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It is very sad and reflective but well written.

Thank you for sharing this with us.

Kie


Re: So Long (User Rating: 1 )
by JadedExistence on Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 05:29:03 PM AEST
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Sad and a little tragic, very well written. Good write.
~JadedExistence~


Re: So Long (User Rating: 1 )
by Cynthia on Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 07:53:31 PM AEST
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Remy, I love the style of this poem. I've never seen anything like it. I loved it. Kepp writing and I'll keep reading. *S* Cynthia


Re: So Long (User Rating: 1 )
by JamesStockdale on Monday, 3rd August 2020 @ 04:56:06 PM AEST
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Wow this was great........................!




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