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[aid] => mick
[title] => Classic Contradictions
[time] => 2004-04-22 04:46:01
[hometext] => this is another commentary on our twisted little world and beliefs... feedback is appreciated.
[bodytext] => The sun comes up, the sun goes down;
The moon smiles, and then it frowns;
The tides come in, and then wash out;
After harvest will reign the draught.
Hear the calm before the storm?
Such silent screams stillborn to warn;
In the land of milk and honey,
Cities burn as fast as money.
Paranoid schitzophrenic;
Everyone is swimming in it.
Drown like fish out of the bowl,
Drinking smog and liquid coal.
Sad our cultural contradictions,
Birth holy wars and mass affliction.
Forgive your foes and the uncouth,
Or eye for eye and tooth for tooth?
In His moment on the cross,
Life was found, life was lost;
Perfection's fist asked in irony,
"Why has thou forsaken me?"
[comments] => 12
[counter] => 282
[topic] => 39
[informant] => jason_robert_britt
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 23
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Grief
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Classic Contradictions
Contributed by
jason_robert_britt
on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 04:46:01 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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The sun comes up, the sun goes down;
The moon smiles, and then it frowns;
The tides come in, and then wash out;
After harvest will reign the draught.
Hear the calm before the storm?
Such silent screams stillborn to warn;
In the land of milk and honey,
Cities burn as fast as money.
Paranoid schitzophrenic;
Everyone is swimming in it.
Drown like fish out of the bowl,
Drinking smog and liquid coal.
Sad our cultural contradictions,
Birth holy wars and mass affliction.
Forgive your foes and the uncouth,
Or eye for eye and tooth for tooth?
In His moment on the cross,
Life was found, life was lost;
Perfection's fist asked in irony,
"Why has thou forsaken me?"
Copyright ©
jason_robert_britt
... [
2004-04-22 04:46:01]
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Re: Classic Contradictions
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by Hurretje on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 04:58:28 AM AEST
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Sharp poem that makes one think and reconsider.
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Re: Classic Contradictions
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by venkat on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 05:43:53 AM AEST
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| This is really a good poem..Write more and more..venkat |
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Re: Classic Contradictions
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 02:21:13 PM AEST
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very interesting poem my dear friend I hope we can speak soon and I hope you continue writing your poetry. I liked how this flowed.
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Re: Classic Contradictions
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by Remy on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 02:59:05 PM AEST
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peculiar way that it all enterwines so closely, i liked the way you pieced it together... great write! ;0)
~Remy~ |
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Re: Classic Contradictions
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by Kie on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 04:08:07 PM AEST
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This poem is pure talent. I was really impressed with it and it is powerful and makes a strong statement. The ending was perfection.
Kie |
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Re: Classic Contradictions
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by The_Phantom on
Sunday, 9th May 2004 @ 12:00:59 PM AEST
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Awsome poem my friend and long time no see, always enjoy your writing, this poem was great talk to you later.
The Phantom |
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Re: Classic Contradictions
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th May 2004 @ 12:28:38 AM AEST
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dammit man. why the hell aren't you famous yet? write a book, make a cd, do something, just get it out there. your work needs to be read by more people than this site will probably ever see. if i had the attention span or the time, i'd list all the things about this scrawl that make it amazing, but i don't. so i'll just say that, once again, your talent is obvious and astounding.
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Re: Classic Contradictions
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by carebear on
Monday, 10th May 2004 @ 11:16:45 PM AEST
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Hey Bro,
I'm just dropping in to check up on you havn't seen you online much *sniffles* I miss you...I hope your alright and btw this poem was something else way darker then anything I could ever write I promise you that "WOW" I'd hug you if I could:) ne way keep writing..much love and poet respect
luv sis
Care |
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Re: Classic Contradictions
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by Archie on
Sunday, 30th May 2004 @ 05:57:30 AM AEST
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| This is an awesome poem, not only so you show that Jesus was just as human as any of us. (Ofcourse he was with out sin) great write. |
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Re: Classic Contradictions
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by Bizzy on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 09:20:29 PM AEST
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You are quite a poet, Jason_robert_britt!
This poem is outstanding! You already have so many comments, but I think I'd like to say that I admire the way your brain works! I've read and commented previously on some of your other poems.
An old friend, Grandma Bizzy |
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Re: Classic Contradictions
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by RobertKilpatrick on
Saturday, 10th July 2004 @ 02:54:11 AM AEST
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| Fantastic: Fantastic poem... Nice stanzas.... |
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Re: Classic Contradictions
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by Bizzy on
Friday, 11th August 2006 @ 08:08:31 PM AEST
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| Jason, I've been away from the site awhile. I see that I have commented already, about 3 ? years ago, but, I must say again, I really love the way you write, not always some of the words you use, and I'm not a fan of dark poetry, but this that you do is so powerful. As Cancer commented, you really must do something that will put you out among the reading public. Blessings to you. 'Bizzy' |
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