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Array ( [sid] => 43805 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => nothing [time] => 2004-04-18 19:15:14 [hometext] => my pain goes deep, too deep to heal [bodytext] => sitting on a bench
waiting for my bus
this girl came up to me
sitting by my side
she looked at me
i looked back
im going to kill myself
these words stopped my breathe
why i asked
looking in her eyes
the pain and anger shown thru
and as she told me my heart broke
her father was abusive
her mother killed herself
and she was all alone
missing her past
dreading her future
i was lost for words
my bus came and went
i stayed with her
talking and crying
till suicide was not her fate
saving her from herself

this girl I speak of is me but no one cares to save me

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nothing

Contributed by hurtingangel2291 on Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 07:15:14 PM in AEST
Topic: Suicide

sitting on a bench
waiting for my bus
this girl came up to me
sitting by my side
she looked at me
i looked back
im going to kill myself
these words stopped my breathe
why i asked
looking in her eyes
the pain and anger shown thru
and as she told me my heart broke
her father was abusive
her mother killed herself
and she was all alone
missing her past
dreading her future
i was lost for words
my bus came and went
i stayed with her
talking and crying
till suicide was not her fate
saving her from herself

this girl I speak of is me but no one cares to save me

Copyright © hurtingangel2291 ... [ 2004-04-18 19:15:14]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: nothing (User Rating: 1 )
by JadedExistence on Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 07:18:53 PM AEST
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I don't know what to say about this, it is incredibly sad and amazingly written. I love how you made it into a story about another person.
P.S. Since this is the first poem of your I have read I will extend a belated welcome to YPDC. I look forward to reading your other writes.
~JadedExistence~

Re: nothing (User Rating: 1 )
by full_blur on Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 07:25:11 PM AEST
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very beautiful, sad but beautiful. i love your straightforward but moving style

Re: nothing (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_Kalicharan on Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 09:26:10 PM AEST
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Oh Angel...once again, you have tugged at my heart strings.... This was so well written...you have such a unique style...I love it.
Plesae feel free to pm me if you need a friendly ear.....
Jenni

Re: nothing (User Rating: 1 )
by MoonlitAngel on Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 01:12:51 AM AEST
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That's beauuuuuuutiful... you said so much with so few words. Hauntingly written... wonderful job!!

~ Moonlit

Re: nothing (User Rating: 1 )
by emphaticplacebo on Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 09:09:11 AM AEST
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this is such an amazing sad poem.. but i totally dig your vibe, and i know where youre coming from. you write so well, and the poem is very confronting.. I look forward to reading more

Re: nothing (User Rating: 1 )
by parkman on Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 12:06:24 PM AEST
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Excellent style of writing, a read that many could relate to, nice one

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