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[aid] => mick
[title] => Everything
[time] => 2004-04-18 15:40:39
[hometext] => I am new to writing poetry, if you could comment honestly on this poem it would help me out. Thank you and God Bless!
[bodytext] => What do you have,
when you have nothing,
but the one who created you,
and set you free?
Your sins are forgiven,
and you are loved;
So what do u have?
Everything.
[comments] => 13
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[informant] => eternallyloved
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[ratings] => 6
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[associated] =>
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Everything
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eternallyloved
on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 03:40:39 PM in AEST
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What do you have,
when you have nothing,
but the one who created you,
and set you free?
Your sins are forgiven,
and you are loved;
So what do u have?
Everything.
Copyright ©
eternallyloved
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2004-04-18 15:40:39]
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Re: Everything
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by brookiecookie02 on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 03:44:16 PM AEST
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| this is truely an amazing poem for a beginer!! we certenly do have everything if we have God. welcome to poetry!! im sure u will enjoy it very much just as i and many other people do! feel free to send me a message |
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Re: Everything
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by AnGeL_M on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 04:42:18 PM AEST
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This Is An Amazing Write !!!!! Very Well Done...
Speakes Of Our Heavenly Father Above..
God Bless And Welcome To Ypdc....
*******LoVe**AnGeL*********
*******************************
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Re: Everything
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 05:23:41 PM AEST
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Truly amazing piece.... very insightful... Welcome to the family..
Jenni |
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Re: Everything
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by poetrygodslove on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 08:55:13 PM AEST
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| very well done. right to the point nothing else needs to be said. i like it alot sandy |
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Re: Everything
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by emystar on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 11:45:38 PM AEST
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Very good one here 2.
Short and to the point yet powerfull.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Everything
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 05:37:18 AM AEST
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I wouldn't go as far as 'amazing', or even 'wonderful' or other such inappropriate laudations. Instead, I'll just say that this is a good start, where you have posed a quasi-religious/philosophical question that provokes thought within me.
I'd say that you can never truly have 'nothing', because 'nothing' does not ever exist, in my eyes. Of course, I'm not inclined to religious dogma, so your viewpoint (whilst appropriate for Christian worshippers) left me asking more questions of the poem, which is always a good thing, as opposed to having just clicked on another and passed it by.
Keep writing, I'm sure you'll improve quite rapidly. |
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Re: Everything
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by Dawny on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 09:56:30 AM AEST
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Nice inciteful poem, I agree well written for a beginner. Keep writing you have talent and potential.
Love Dawny x |
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Re: Everything
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by Stitch on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 01:05:20 PM AEST
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Nice stuff. So simple, so true, so well said. So many people who need to hear this.
Stitch |
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Re: Everything
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by arden on
Monday, 19th April 2004 @ 03:45:54 PM AEST
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short and simple, could use some more depth but its still very awesome. i enjoyed it well done.
Arden |
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Re: Everything
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 01:17:03 AM AEST
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Looks to me like you got your comments...
Now I did read it and it's ummm alright....I dont particularly like Religious poetry but everything else is great.
Lindsey |
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Re: Everything
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by lonely_kakashi on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 05:46:29 PM AEST
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Very thought provoking
:D
Kakashi
P.S i only started writing poems last tuesday! so dont worry lol |
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Re: Everything
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by GODSBESTIMAGE on
Tuesday, 27th April 2004 @ 05:03:17 PM AEST
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Well put. That's exactly how I feel.
Gwenmarie |
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Re: Everything
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by Lionel on
Friday, 24th September 2004 @ 03:25:31 PM AEST
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| Very good. Most conveyed, with least words, I've seen. God Bless |
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