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Colour
Contributed by
ALineAboveTheStepBeneath
on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 07:46:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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You can't see
The droplets of blood
That hit the floor
And spatter our shoes
With a flash of crimson
But I can
Your words cut me deep
Oh, well
We could use a little colour
In our lives
Copyright ©
ALineAboveTheStepBeneath
... [
2004-04-15 19:46:39] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Colour
(User Rating: 1 ) by painfullyme on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 08:44:27 PM AEST (User
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this is awesome. i love how simple it is. there is quite a bit of emotion in this piece. i love the last three lines. they make the poem so simple and bring it to a sarcastic close all at once. great!! |
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Re: Colour
(User Rating: 1 ) by morelikelyrics on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 09:41:34 PM AEST (User
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two minutes, two days, two years.... it wouldnt have mattered how long it took to write this, its still
I love the sarcasm:
Oh, well
We could use a little colour
In our lives
Just so great...
~Morelikelyrics |
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Re: Colour
(User Rating: 1 ) by morelikelyrics on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 09:42:40 PM AEST (User
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whoops! i left out the last of that sentence!
I meant its still an exclellent write, and i think i might just go back and read it again.
Keep it up!
~Morelikelyrics |
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Re: Colour
(User Rating: 1 ) by ThePumpkinKing on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 09:47:14 PM AEST (User
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oh man, this was awesome!!! I love sarcastic stuff...this was such a great poem...i loved this a lot! *re-reads over and over* awesome job! |
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Re: Colour
(User Rating: 1 ) by SkaterGirl16 on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 10:51:34 PM AEST (User
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Funny how our best ideas hit us that fast isnt it? ^_^ Nice job! |
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