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Array ( [sid] => 42131 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => With This Gun [time] => 2004-04-07 04:47:13 [hometext] => I was feeling very lonely and useless today and wrote this in a fit of anger... Not really serious about the thoughts, just trying to get them out of my head... [bodytext] => With this gun, the earth will stop
With this gun, my corpse will drop
My heart will beat a few seconds more
What will I see on the other side of deaths door?

With this gun, not a soul will cry
With this gun, my body and essence will die
My hands and legs grow fragile and cold
What happens when this existence has become old?

With this gun, the world will shatter
With this gun, my murder won’t matter
My head won’t articulate another thought
What happens when this pistol is bought?

With this gun, no tears were shed
With this gun, throughout eyes and ears that bled
My hope is devastated and peers horrified
What transpired when I died?
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With This Gun

Contributed by strange_lindsey on Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 04:47:13 AM in AEST
Topic: Suicide

With this gun, the earth will stop
With this gun, my corpse will drop
My heart will beat a few seconds more
What will I see on the other side of deaths door?

With this gun, not a soul will cry
With this gun, my body and essence will die
My hands and legs grow fragile and cold
What happens when this existence has become old?

With this gun, the world will shatter
With this gun, my murder won’t matter
My head won’t articulate another thought
What happens when this pistol is bought?

With this gun, no tears were shed
With this gun, throughout eyes and ears that bled
My hope is devastated and peers horrified
What transpired when I died?

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Re: With This Gun (User Rating: 1 )
by srugglingyoungster on Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 05:25:24 AM AEST
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wow. i hope you are right when you said your not being serious. Its good but really strong. kepp writing.

Re: With This Gun (User Rating: 1 )
by Vitreous_Soul on Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 09:21:46 AM AEST
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Reminds me so much of my own thoughts, the similarity is a bit haunting.

A smooth flowing rhyme gives this a very good backdrop, and sets the stage for your intense emotions (and immense talent) to sketch your vivid picture...and weave your spell.

Truly,
-V.S.

Re: With This Gun (User Rating: 1 )
by fallensilence on Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 11:39:58 AM AEST
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very good poem. i enjoyed reading it. -david

Re: With This Gun (User Rating: 1 )
by corrupted_minds on Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 06:38:17 PM AEST
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these poems are soo good, they are so powerful full of raw emotions. i hope you feel better soon for i went through exactly the same feelings but i know that you can get through this no matter how dark the tunnel seems. Talk to someone anyone, we are all here for you.
woei queen

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