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[sid] => 40941
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => -low at 30 thousand feet-
[time] => 2004-03-30 02:55:06
[hometext] => i'm on a plane and i want god to smack it out of the sky
[bodytext] => call the time
pull the sheet
the fire's almost out
wreckage nearly cleared
set the remote
rewind the tape to the point
to where you forgot hold
on and on
scream for the climax
smeared with blood and bile
press pause on your pulse
and gather your breath
catch your courage
life under a microscope
watching it all play out
set in slow motion
add background music
to when you hoped against hope
hoped for a splinter of salvation
prayed to wake up
prayed for a plane crash
......... ****
[comments] => 17
[counter] => 229
[topic] => 48
[informant] => TaintedOptomist
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 10
[ratings] => 2
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => EmotionalPoetry
)
-low at 30 thousand feet-
Contributed by
TaintedOptomist
on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 02:55:06 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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call the time
pull the sheet
the fire's almost out
wreckage nearly cleared
set the remote
rewind the tape to the point
to where you forgot hold
on and on
scream for the climax
smeared with blood and bile
press pause on your pulse
and gather your breath
catch your courage
life under a microscope
watching it all play out
set in slow motion
add background music
to when you hoped against hope
hoped for a splinter of salvation
prayed to wake up
prayed for a plane crash
......... ****
Copyright ©
TaintedOptomist
... [
2004-03-30 02:55:06]
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by TaintedOptomist on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 02:57:19 AM AEST
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| i apollagize for the typos in this horrible keyboard |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by Dove on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 03:30:29 AM AEST
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I like the verses..Quite intresting..
Dove |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 06:27:50 AM AEST
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| INteresting use of imagery here. I like the way you used a cinematic analogy in parts. I thought I was reading a plane crash, but no - I was mistaken . . . |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by Avarice_Riot on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 09:16:40 AM AEST
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| Interesting subject...the twist at the end sort of jolted me. Well done. |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 10:53:45 PM AEST
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| awesome poem, i liked it alot clayton |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 11:05:59 PM AEST
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| nice poem, whats your email address, jw |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by TaintedOptomist on
Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 10:58:23 PM AEST
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| TheImfamousAPT213@hotmail |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 11:55:31 PM AEST
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your email doesnt work
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by TaintedOptomist on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 07:47:22 PM AEST
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| trust me it works. |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 10:22:31 PM AEST
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| no, it really doesnt, it says it doesnt exist |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by TaintedOptomist on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 02:28:48 AM AEST
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| eh.... teenagepoetry102@netscape.com |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 10:54:23 PM AEST
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| umm yeah, it still wont work |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by TaintedOptomist on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 04:01:34 PM AEST
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| well i don't know what to tell you give me your e-mail then |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 04:12:29 PM AEST
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| its demonangel35@hotmail.com |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 12:04:23 PM AEST
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| or u can use deaths_morbid_angel_666@hotmail.com |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Sunday, 20th June 2004 @ 08:30:26 PM AEST
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I eally enjoyed this one keep it up kep it coming...
much love,
Dani |
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Re: -low at 30 thousand feet-
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 02:29:21 AM AEST
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| nice poem |
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