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I watched the stars
Fall out fo your eyes
Your world fell apart
I wanted to pick up
The shattered pieces
But there were just too many
My heart bled for you
I wanted to give you my hand
But I couldn't reach that far
And I saw the stars
Fall out fo your eyes
But all I could do was stare
And you're falling
But it's hard for me
To even stand up [comments] => 4 [counter] => 199 [topic] => 34 [informant] => MyLastBreath [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => SongLyrics )

When You Were In Despair

Contributed by MyLastBreath on Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 12:17:50 PM in AEST
Topic: SongLyrics

When you were in despair
I watched the stars
Fall out fo your eyes
Your world fell apart
I wanted to pick up
The shattered pieces
But there were just too many
My heart bled for you
I wanted to give you my hand
But I couldn't reach that far
And I saw the stars
Fall out fo your eyes
But all I could do was stare
And you're falling
But it's hard for me
To even stand up

Copyright © MyLastBreath ... [ 2004-03-28 12:17:50]
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Re: When You Were In Despair (User Rating: 1 )
by arden on Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 12:27:39 PM AEST
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oh i very much enjoyed this! beautifully written. i loved this. well done keep up the awesome work.
Arden

Re: When You Were In Despair (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 12:36:28 PM AEST
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Paints a sad, but vivid picture. A small annoyance is the 'fo' - its either from or of, I can't decide.
Good poem, though.

Re: When You Were In Despair (User Rating: 1 )
by JennyFruFru on Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 12:53:26 PM AEST
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FAllen stars paint such a sad picture of beauty. Nicely done :)

Re: When You Were In Despair (User Rating: 1 )
by Necromant on Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 03:42:54 PM AEST
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Oh I really enjoyed reading it a lot. Its a bit saddening though, the wording is great!
Anne :D

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