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[title] => Unborn Dove Rainbows
[time] => 2004-03-09 15:29:42
[hometext] => from archives: this is the hardest poem i ever wrote, i still cry each time i read it, im crying now...
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Oh, Unborn child, did you ever know
These arms held so much love for you
~Why did you have to go?~
My heart and soul in you, is still entwined
And revolves around you, in endless time.
You are now a rainbow as I look above
Though look next to you; your not alone my Dove
I knew you deep inside me, with all my heart
Did not know before we met, we would part.
There is some comfort in the knowing
Although sweet stories we can't be sharing
You are no longer there alone anymore
I wait here and will someday open that door.
Little Darling let me tell you why it is I cry
Our family is apart; you & your daddy in the sky
And yet there were the little Unborn Twins-
No time for balls, soccer games, diaper pins..
Halfway incubated to seeing teddy bears
The ultrasound 'picture show' was bare-
Little piles quietly lying on the bottom
Only pictures ever of you & still I've got 'em.
All of you together now, my lost loves
On a Rainbow soaring with an Eagle-
~My three little Doves~
So Kids, now you know when you look down
Moms looking for Rainbows from Earths ground.
~in tune of kids jumping ropes~:
"Coulda been! Woulda been! Shoulda been 6!
Let's All Go Now; We'll play 'Pick-up Sticks' !
Look Mom We're high up at Rainbows Gate!
Shoulda been! Woulda been!; Someday be 8!"
Copyright © ladyfawn 4/21/2002
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Unborn Dove Rainbows
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 03:29:42 PM in AEST
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Oh, Unborn child, did you ever know
These arms held so much love for you
~Why did you have to go?~
My heart and soul in you, is still entwined
And revolves around you, in endless time.
You are now a rainbow as I look above
Though look next to you; your not alone my Dove
I knew you deep inside me, with all my heart
Did not know before we met, we would part.
There is some comfort in the knowing
Although sweet stories we can't be sharing
You are no longer there alone anymore
I wait here and will someday open that door.
Little Darling let me tell you why it is I cry
Our family is apart; you & your daddy in the sky
And yet there were the little Unborn Twins-
No time for balls, soccer games, diaper pins..
Halfway incubated to seeing teddy bears
The ultrasound 'picture show' was bare-
Little piles quietly lying on the bottom
Only pictures ever of you & still I've got 'em.
All of you together now, my lost loves
On a Rainbow soaring with an Eagle-
~My three little Doves~
So Kids, now you know when you look down
Moms looking for Rainbows from Earths ground.
~in tune of kids jumping ropes~:
"Coulda been! Woulda been! Shoulda been 6!
Let's All Go Now; We'll play 'Pick-up Sticks' !
Look Mom We're high up at Rainbows Gate!
Shoulda been! Woulda been!; Someday be 8!"
Copyright © ladyfawn 4/21/2002
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ladyfawn
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Re: Unborn Dove Rainbows
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by PoeticRequiem on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 03:34:22 PM AEST
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Wow incredibly deep and powerful this poem resonates I love it sorry to have to find so much joy in your pain but alas it is an interesting illusion this life is. Thanks-
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by arden on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 03:37:05 PM AEST
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omg that is soo sad :(
i loved how you wrote this. it is so beautiful. nicely done by a very talented poet.
Arden |
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 03:39:15 PM AEST
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| This is a poem that hits hard every time. The second time (just now) hit me as hard as the first time. It feels like a sweeping tingle running up and down my body and it makes me want to cry and hard. This is so powerful that I can't even find words to tell you how this makes me feel. I am glad you re-submitted it because so many new people miss out on your mass amount of talent archived here. Loved this one Ness. Touched my heart so deeply. One last thing--so much pain and somehow you turned it into a work of beauty. Kie |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 03:48:17 PM AEST
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This is so beautiful and so sad, it tears at my heart. You will meet them one day and it might be selfish of me to say this, but i hope its not a day anytime soon.
This was written perfectly hun, i'm glad you reposted it. big huggles!
Love and Hugs
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 03:49:02 PM AEST
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very emotional write - the last stanza's still echoing in my head. . . .
thanks for sharing. |
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 04:18:30 PM AEST
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Oh Ness...this is so beautiful..... and so touching..and that's all I can say at this time... sigh.....
Luv and huggies
Jenni |
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by Putteragain on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 04:20:08 PM AEST
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my heart is with you and this is such an incredible write nessa words from me could never do it justice
lotsa love
michelle |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 04:23:46 PM AEST
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you always seem to manage to come out with such beautiful powerful work. you can tell you have given everything when you wrote this. If poetry's purpose is to touch you inside- then this is poetry.
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by AliB on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 04:57:47 PM AEST
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Hi Nessa
I agree wholeheartedly with everything that's been said. Truely beautiful. Makes me put my troubles into perspective slightly. We'll have to chat soon, play catch up.
Take care.
Ali xx |
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 06:25:07 PM AEST
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very loveing and wonderful write...brought tears to my eyes... so poinant
Shari |
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 06:25:08 PM AEST
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very loveing and wonderful write...brought tears to my eyes... so poinant
Shari |
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by twinkletoes on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 06:44:41 PM AEST
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How does one respond?
Although soaked in greif and pain, I see the natural human spirit that sees light at the end of a very long tunnel, I see colour splashed over the grey. You are one tough person.
tt |
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by Rakerman1999 on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 08:17:09 PM AEST
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The emotion in this is overwhelming.....the beauty with which it is written is unmistakably Ladyfawn. The bitterness of life hasn't tainted the sweetness of your heart .
Roses at your feet by the dozens
Larry |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 09:16:34 PM AEST
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Nessa, you have the most miraculous gift and a strong loving heart to share it with us. This deserves a repost and a repost and another and another. You will all be together one day to never be parted again.
Love and hugs,
Rita |
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by Stalkee on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 10:16:15 PM AEST
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| thats so sad...goes along with my mood, heh...i really liked this...good job...stalkee |
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by blueheart on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 11:47:01 PM AEST
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Aww... Nessa...this is a beautiful poem, the emotion drips from every word. Possibly one of your best.
Amazing write, captivated my soul. |
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Re: Unborn Dove Rainbows
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 10th March 2004 @ 02:02:43 AM AEST
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| Very heart moving.. emotional cries of mother gets a downpour of a rain and creates a rainbow with sorrowful hues venkat |
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by DreamWeaver on
Wednesday, 10th March 2004 @ 02:58:51 AM AEST
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| Aaahhh Nessa, I remember reading this the first time round, and how much it affected me then ... you have written the most heartwrenching poem that none of us will ever forget ... my heart goes out to you for your loss at that time ... big hugs *daisies* Jan |
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Wednesday, 10th March 2004 @ 04:23:14 AM AEST
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I can see why this poem was singled out...simply put, this is the most emotional piece i've ever had the honour of reading. You really made me feel everything as if it had happened to me...gorgeous, tinged with melancholia, a masterpiece of poetry and emotion.
Truly,
-V.S. |
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by Pompous on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 05:39:20 AM AEST
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| so beautiful yet so sad, very very moving |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 07:07:09 AM AEST
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| Omg! |
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by Avarice_Riot on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 09:36:33 AM AEST
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| This is an incredibly beautiful poem, there is so much emotion in here. You are a truly talented poet, thank you for sharing this with us. |
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by wolfdreamer on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 10:06:29 AM AEST
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This is so heartbreakingly sad and touches the heart and soul of every woman. We strive to bring life into the world and it is so devastating to lose it. {{{nessa}}} you are such a special person to be able to share such deep and painful emotions with us in your beautiful poetry.
hugs
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by yellow_sundragon on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 05:21:35 PM AEST
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~Nessa~ O.. M...G... *takes a moment to get in order*
That was beautiful... I'm crying (in the middle of a library, thanks) it was so so pretty... and infused with love....
*J* |
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by faithmairee on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 07:08:49 PM AEST
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very beautiful poem...i almost cried because of the sorrowfulness i felt with each word and the memory of my own long gone but not forgotten rainbow...my only one so this poem really hit home and i am holding back the tears....great poem!
faith |
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by Cynthia on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 09:21:40 PM AEST
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| OMG Nessa, this is so sad. :( I am so sorry for your loss. May Gosd bring all together again as one. I had tears in my eyes as I read this. *HUGS* *S* Cynthia |
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by emystar on
Friday, 12th March 2004 @ 01:53:38 AM AEST
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Oh nessa,
I never knew this. Guess I missed it on the ole site.
There jus aren't words to exspress how this one moves my heart, soul, spirit.
My heart bleeds for u. U r such a sweet, thoughtfull, caring person.
I'm tongue tied, sorry.
Girl I luv ya and I'm so happy u reposted this.
This one will have anyone in tears.
luv, huggs, tears,
emy |
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by afraid_of_fear on
Friday, 12th March 2004 @ 07:46:12 PM AEST
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this is heart-breaking... a beautiful, beautiful poem..
x_x_x |
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by afraid_of_fear on
Friday, 12th March 2004 @ 07:55:34 PM AEST
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i'm sorry, i meant heart-wrenching.. there is so much love in this.. im so sorry you've had to go through this..
x_x_x |
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by jonteD on
Saturday, 13th March 2004 @ 02:39:35 PM AEST
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| Classic poetry |
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 13th March 2004 @ 08:10:06 PM AEST
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Dear Nessa,
I'm so glad I asked for your link. This is so terribly tragic. I've lost grown children (ended relationships) and maybe they are dead now I don't know. I can't imagine the pain you must have experienced. I'm so sorry for your losses.
I'm doubly glad that you write it all down in a poem.....part of your heart on the paper.....helps to relieve the pain in your heart's heart!
Hugs and more hugs
I love you
consue |
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by wyrd_faerie on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 02:27:12 PM AEST
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| oh nessa, i don't know what to say. this is so beautiful. you are so, so strong, not just to go through this, but to post such a sensitive piece of your life on here, laid bare infront of so many people...god...i love you nessa xxx |
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by New_York_Chick on
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| sad, but very well written |
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by forever_lonely on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 11:47:22 PM AEST
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I have a lump in my throat the size of my heart, i think it skipped so many beats it had to come up itself for air, nessa this is beautiful, such strong emotions, i lmost cried myself reading this, beautiful truely beautiful
Luke xxx |
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by silent on
Thursday, 25th March 2004 @ 09:55:18 AM AEST
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I am so sorry for you, this is beautifully written poetry, truly touching.
Take care,
Silent |
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 27th March 2004 @ 02:13:25 PM AEST
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Nessa! *HUGS* Aww hunny this was beautifully written. I'm positive they are all up there smiling down upon you, dear Nessa. For you are an angel in waiting...a savior... thank you for sharing this heartbreaking story with us. You are so strong. Thank you :)
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by Aika on
Wednesday, 14th April 2004 @ 12:37:08 PM AEST
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| oh God! this made me cry... i know how it hurts.. .... All my love, Aika:-) |
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by LEMMEN on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 02:55:31 PM AEST
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I know of this sadness this pain you must have and still do fell. May god bless you and your words and your life. May it always live with the colors of the rainbow. And know they are looking at you from above.
~~DENNIS~~ |
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