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Array ( [sid] => 37854 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Immortal Sin [time] => 2004-03-08 18:43:42 [hometext] => [bodytext] => Blood drips from her open wounds,
so red was the color of her paint,
she filled the cup with her immortal sin
and dipped in the brush to paint within.
the picture she paints with pain and dispair,
tells a story to all of what wasnt fair,
she doesnt think of what she sees
only believes in what she feels.
the knife that left her wounds so deep
controls the thoughts of devil's keep
and as she continues to lay
painting the picture of whats within
she fills the cup with immortal sin.
what will others think of her art,
which she created on the white canvus of cotton?
what will it matter anyway?
she has painted her insides
so beautifully filled through out the canvus
she dips the brush just one last time
to paint to the art of whats within
dipped inside her immortal sin.

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Immortal Sin

Contributed by rawkergurl2003 on Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 06:43:42 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

Blood drips from her open wounds,
so red was the color of her paint,
she filled the cup with her immortal sin
and dipped in the brush to paint within.
the picture she paints with pain and dispair,
tells a story to all of what wasnt fair,
she doesnt think of what she sees
only believes in what she feels.
the knife that left her wounds so deep
controls the thoughts of devil's keep
and as she continues to lay
painting the picture of whats within
she fills the cup with immortal sin.
what will others think of her art,
which she created on the white canvus of cotton?
what will it matter anyway?
she has painted her insides
so beautifully filled through out the canvus
she dips the brush just one last time
to paint to the art of whats within
dipped inside her immortal sin.

Copyright © rawkergurl2003 ... [ 2004-03-08 18:43:42]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Immortal Sin (User Rating: 1 )
by Avarice_Riot on Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 02:04:50 AM AEST
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Whoa, that was intense! Great usage of painting on canvas to describe the emotion in the poem. Great write!

Re: Immortal Sin (User Rating: 1 )
by Vitreous_Soul on Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 07:00:16 AM AEST
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Reminds me of that old horror flick "Color Me Blood Red." Very graphic, very enjoyable to read.

Truly,
-V.S.

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