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[title] => los' angeles- forever young
[time] => 2004-02-28 17:53:38
[hometext] => memory of killer's breath when once he whispered to me; true
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_____strangler's afternoon_____
she was standing at a crossroads
she was late
you know there was no one to call
twisted fate
walking along the same avenue
behind her
'would you like to meet the strangler'
in her neck he said to her
hair in shocked mortalitys fright
from his whispers
a heart stopping moment
fear
she hurridly walked straight ahead
called an unknown name
(hey! tom! here i am!)
would she ever see home?
see a sun rise again?
saved by that old man clipping his bushes
she did not want to be dead then
____________perhaps:____________
for a while he stood, muttering and
musing by the shore of the ocean
________9pm evening________
date with a sexy wooden legged man
he held me tight
tossed me out because i wanted to see
alone walking at midnight
thinking about that day; was all rushed,
that afternoons scary hush
_____________hillsides_____________
the killer's mistaken identity
and i missed my bus
_________stranger's last breath_________
found later that evening a similar girl
he stalked our long auburn hair
murdered on the celeb steps bustop
this was where
this other girl had to die by him
he killed the wrong one
not that it mattered to him, his mistake
he went to his bed; los' angeles sun rose again
_________________________________
this was my route that time of night
paths of twisted fate
carrying this guilt through the years
for my being late
~*~
*the city now has one more angel,
she accidently died in my place,
this poem is dedicated to her,
forever young...
all of them.
§* *§
*|*
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los' angeles- forever young
Contributed by
ladyfawn
on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 05:53:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
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_____strangler's afternoon_____
she was standing at a crossroads
she was late
you know there was no one to call
twisted fate
walking along the same avenue
behind her
'would you like to meet the strangler'
in her neck he said to her
hair in shocked mortalitys fright
from his whispers
a heart stopping moment
fear
she hurridly walked straight ahead
called an unknown name
(hey! tom! here i am!)
would she ever see home?
see a sun rise again?
saved by that old man clipping his bushes
she did not want to be dead then
____________perhaps:____________
for a while he stood, muttering and
musing by the shore of the ocean
________9pm evening________
date with a sexy wooden legged man
he held me tight
tossed me out because i wanted to see
alone walking at midnight
thinking about that day; was all rushed,
that afternoons scary hush
_____________hillsides_____________
the killer's mistaken identity
and i missed my bus
_________stranger's last breath_________
found later that evening a similar girl
he stalked our long auburn hair
murdered on the celeb steps bustop
this was where
this other girl had to die by him
he killed the wrong one
not that it mattered to him, his mistake
he went to his bed; los' angeles sun rose again
_________________________________
this was my route that time of night
paths of twisted fate
carrying this guilt through the years
for my being late
~*~
*the city now has one more angel,
she accidently died in my place,
this poem is dedicated to her,
forever young...
all of them.
§* *§
*|*
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ladyfawn
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Re: los' angeles- forever young
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by doug on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 05:59:29 PM AEST
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nice one i enjoyed reading it
keep it up your friend doug |
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Re: los' angeles- forever young
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 06:06:24 PM AEST
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very original excellent work
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Re: los' angeles- forever young
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by loveisendless on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 06:10:34 PM AEST
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SCARY,BUT BRAVE,SOMETHINGS OR PEOPLE YOU JUST CAN'T SAVE! AT LEAST ONE OF YOU DID LIVE,INSTEAD OF NONE!!
AND WITH THAT,YOUR BEAUTIFUL POEMS STILL RUN-THANK GOD!!!
LOL-DAN!!!! |
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Re: los' angeles- forever young
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 07:30:17 PM AEST
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Interesting write, Ness..
Hugs
jenni |
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Re: los' angeles- forever young
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by emystar on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 07:33:18 PM AEST
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Very mystical and hair raising!
good work.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: los' angeles- forever young
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 08:10:52 PM AEST
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The hand of fate.....no one ever knows who it will touch next. This was spellbinding Nessa...written to perfection. You should feel no guilt for things that are beyond our control. Glad you are still here with us (((nessa)))
Roses
Larry |
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Re: los' angeles- forever young
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by karl_wiggins on
Sunday, 29th February 2004 @ 06:24:51 PM AEST
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Forget the guilt, Nessa. It's a useles emotion that weighs us down. If we have reasons to be guilty then we must take responsibility and move on. But here you have no reason. The other girl no doubt needed off the earth plane in a hurry, and your own guide was sitting on your shoulder as it's not your turn yet.
Enjoyed the piece, though.
Karl |
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Re: los' angeles- forever young
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by Merry on
Sunday, 29th February 2004 @ 09:26:33 PM AEST
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This is an amazing write Nessa. Fate plays her hand as she wishes and we are either lucky or unlucky. Sounds like you were lucky.
Hugs - glad you were lucky
merry |
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Re: los' angeles- forever young
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 07:00:50 AM AEST
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Awww..Nessa.. this is amazing..like a scene from a ditective film...
ha..ha.. hugs and love my friend. venkat |
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Re: los' angeles- forever young
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by New_York_Chick on
Wednesday, 24th March 2004 @ 09:39:00 PM AEST
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amazing poem
but LA at night is really scary in some places, I actually feel safer in NY, maybe cause I'm used to it
we [my mother, my brother and me] were supposed to return the car we were renting at 8pm to Union Station, we never did, cause it was just too scary |
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Re: los' angeles- forever young
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by Queen_Dolly on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 02:49:50 AM AEST
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This is so beautiful and so tragic.. an emotive write.
R.I.P.
An excellent read.
Queen_Dolly |
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