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[aid] => mick
[title] => Press a Little Harder
[time] => 2004-02-17 13:35:17
[hometext] => Any and all comments appreciated.
[bodytext] => I feel so cold
No warmth can reach me
It's deep down inside
Where no one can see
I just don't care anymore
I'm too tired to try
I can't even feel enough
To sit down and cry
I feel the cold steel, glide across my arm
I press a little harder, until it breaks the skin
The blood drips down, across my hand
I cut deeper, trying to reach the pain within
I can't feel anything
Don't see a point to life
I try to find some emotion
As I stare at the blood stained knife
Hoping the emptiness will leave
Like the blood flowing across my palm
My life starts to fade
Leaving me drained and calm
As the darkness envelopes my mind
I know it's finally done
I close my eyes
And know that pain has won
[comments] => 12
[counter] => 297
[topic] => 36
[informant] => JadedExistence
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[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 28
[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Suicide
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Press a Little Harder
Contributed by
JadedExistence
on
Tuesday, 17th February 2004 @ 01:35:17 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I feel so cold
No warmth can reach me
It's deep down inside
Where no one can see
I just don't care anymore
I'm too tired to try
I can't even feel enough
To sit down and cry
I feel the cold steel, glide across my arm
I press a little harder, until it breaks the skin
The blood drips down, across my hand
I cut deeper, trying to reach the pain within
I can't feel anything
Don't see a point to life
I try to find some emotion
As I stare at the blood stained knife
Hoping the emptiness will leave
Like the blood flowing across my palm
My life starts to fade
Leaving me drained and calm
As the darkness envelopes my mind
I know it's finally done
I close my eyes
And know that pain has won
Copyright ©
JadedExistence
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2004-02-17 13:35:17]
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Re: Press a Little Harder
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by Putteragain on
Tuesday, 17th February 2004 @ 01:41:05 PM AEST
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just want to let you know i read this i dont care for suicide poetry but you have a real nice flow with your words it is a well written poem
michelle |
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Re: Press a Little Harder
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by Melissa on
Tuesday, 17th February 2004 @ 01:41:37 PM AEST
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| I pray this is not a cry for help but just a form of art. Either way I have been on both sides please let me know. It is a great read. very dark. |
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Re: Press a Little Harder
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by JadedExistence on
Tuesday, 17th February 2004 @ 01:51:07 PM AEST
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No this is not a cry for help. It would have been if I had written it a year ago but I'm doing a lot better. I used to cut and almost killed myself before one of my friends made me get some help so these are feelings I am well aquainted with and sometimes still feel. It always helps to write about it and that is where most of my poetry comes from.
Thanks for the comments.
-JadedExistence
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Re: Press a Little Harder
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 17th February 2004 @ 01:54:56 PM AEST
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Glad to hear you're OK. Writing about feelings---both old and present---almost always promotes healing. Keep writing and living.
Stitch |
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Re: Press a Little Harder
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by bhavnas on
Tuesday, 17th February 2004 @ 02:14:01 PM AEST
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| very painful....yet so gd n heartrending...cheer up |
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Re: Press a Little Harder
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by Wicked on
Tuesday, 17th February 2004 @ 02:44:56 PM AEST
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This gave me chills, a good write none the less.
Wicked |
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Re: Press a Little Harder
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 17th February 2004 @ 07:27:07 PM AEST
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very good write...it is good to express your feelings this way...as darkness envelopes us we sometimes forget that the light still shines within...my best wishes for you
Shari |
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Re: Press a Little Harder
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by markie on
Wednesday, 18th February 2004 @ 12:36:49 AM AEST
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| This was very well written and I understand the feeling only too well. Dying is easy, it's the living that's hard. I have a friend that tells me "breathe" all the time...sometimes I feel like a star..ya know..if I went out, the universe is so big, who'd miss me? I hate suicide poetry...I write so much of my own LOL. I saw the comment that it isn't a cry for help, and I'm glad...I've been there and back and there again...I do know diddley, and have been formally introduced to squat! (about the subject.) I was a counsellor in a suicide prevention center...but couldn't help myself. Ironic, huh? |
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Re: Press a Little Harder
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by Avarice_Riot on
Wednesday, 18th February 2004 @ 01:28:51 AM AEST
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| Very dark, for some reason it made me look over my shoulder to make sure no one else was there. I liked it, very honest and emotive. Glad to hear you're doing better. Take care. |
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Re: Press a Little Harder
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 18th February 2004 @ 08:28:51 PM AEST
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| I love it. completely captures what it's like to cut. and great flow with the words. good job. |
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Re: Press a Little Harder
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 06:40:14 PM AEST
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wow I loved this. I've been there many times I can relate much. I hope u don't really feel like this because it can be a lonely place.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Press a Little Harder
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by crying-crimson-tears on
Tuesday, 16th March 2004 @ 09:02:13 AM AEST
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| omg. i love this poem. i write a lot of dark/suicide poetry. cuz ive been depressed for 6 years. i cut. im working on stoping though. i can really relate to this poem though. i thought it was really good. |
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