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On the Watch
Contributed by
ksprincess42004
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Tuesday, 10th February 2004 @ 04:25:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Once upon a time I loved you
And once upon a time you hurt me
In more ways than one
The day I learned
It was safer to let go
Was the day you decided
To hold on with an iron fist
So now my gaze
Remains fixed on my back
Just in case you are in the mood
To stab me again
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2004-02-10 16:25:37] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: On the Watch
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 10th February 2004 @ 08:17:04 PM AEST (User
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wo! succinct. I like the part about letting go and the ending is emphatic. good job. |
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Re: On the Watch
(User Rating: 1 ) by neglected1 on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 06:04:26 PM AEST (User
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I like it.. but honestly it didnt really do anything for me... it was kind of dull... but im certainly not here to insult your feelings... you did a goodjob but dont give up.. there is always room for improvment..
some words will always remain hiddin until you let them corupt your mind
~nglected1~ |
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