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[aid] => mick
[title] => Broken Bonds, Broken Life
[time] => 2004-02-07 02:56:51
[hometext] => * I don't know why I wrote this it sort of hit me and I am surpised at the end result... *
[bodytext] => I have broken a hundred and one bonds
And now I lie, weeping,
In a tub slowly filling with my blood
My wrists are the faucets
My 'joy' the sick romance
As steam slowly covers my eyes
With the heat of the moment
I feel no pain, and joy ebbs away
As my life slips under the sweet decay
The same as an eagle cries
As its majesty is ripped from it
I weep a broken, forgotten man
And nothing remains of me as I slip under
Except two air bubbles
Seemingly trapped within the sick stench
Of metal and salt... and then they pop
And nothing more remains of me or my failure
Except an empty, hollow corpse
[comments] => 13
[counter] => 281
[topic] => 36
[informant] => bobotheclown
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 5
[ratings] => 1
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Suicide
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Broken Bonds, Broken Life
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 02:56:51 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I have broken a hundred and one bonds
And now I lie, weeping,
In a tub slowly filling with my blood
My wrists are the faucets
My 'joy' the sick romance
As steam slowly covers my eyes
With the heat of the moment
I feel no pain, and joy ebbs away
As my life slips under the sweet decay
The same as an eagle cries
As its majesty is ripped from it
I weep a broken, forgotten man
And nothing remains of me as I slip under
Except two air bubbles
Seemingly trapped within the sick stench
Of metal and salt... and then they pop
And nothing more remains of me or my failure
Except an empty, hollow corpse
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
... [
2004-02-07 02:56:51]
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by venkat on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 03:07:51 AM AEST
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| Good result.. venkat |
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by afraid_of_fear on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 01:53:15 PM AEST
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this is so good joel, as always.. i loved
I feel no pain, and joy ebbs away
As my life slips under the sweet decay
hope you're alright, ttysoon
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by Necromant on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 07:27:04 PM AEST
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Hmm what a poem! I was immagining myself with slitted wrist ugh don't want to remember, This poem is great full of imagery and there's a lot of bitterness in it, great write!
Anne :D |
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by Kie on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 09:25:03 PM AEST
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| You express your thoughts so well in this write. So much emotion and sadness, it just calls to me. Thank you for sharing it, really liked this one alot. Kie |
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 8th February 2004 @ 01:10:58 AM AEST
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Once again, a brilliant write....
Jenni |
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by lil_angel on
Sunday, 8th February 2004 @ 01:37:41 AM AEST
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| This is a really good write u have a good talent i hope things look up for you! |
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 9th February 2004 @ 06:36:00 AM AEST
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| Wow...Joel...Wow |
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by glitter_and_corpsepaint on
Tuesday, 10th February 2004 @ 12:27:32 AM AEST
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wow. that was quite sad. so vividly written. so much pain in just a few words. outstanding.
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by bopeep on
Tuesday, 10th February 2004 @ 09:01:05 PM AEST
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| i want to cry now. |
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by Ruby1987 on
Monday, 16th February 2004 @ 03:06:18 PM AEST
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Wheneva i visit dis site i am alwayz delighted to read ur poems and sometimez freaked out. Dis is cool and vivid keep writing.
Ruby1987 |
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by Putteragain on
Tuesday, 17th February 2004 @ 01:13:27 PM AEST
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glad i read this it is an incredible write not my taste but it is good non the less
michelle |
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Wednesday, 18th February 2004 @ 09:09:51 PM AEST
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| Intensely graphic, well portrayed, love the darkness within each line, beautifully written poem. |
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Re: Broken Bonds, Broken Life
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by Soulless on
Sunday, 4th April 2004 @ 11:02:53 PM AEST
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I enjoyed this one because it at first made me start to think where this might be going. my confusion then turned to a shiver down my spine when you stated "my wrists are the faucets" I love it when people's writing surprises me and I dont know whats coming. Your poems have a way of satisfying my taste.
Kisses,
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