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Relevant Discrepancies
Contributed by
eternityslyre
on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 03:15:19 AM in AEST
Topic:
didactic
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Times will arise when you're brimming with glee
As you dance and you prance for your new masterpiece
It's always so perfect, it's alway so deep
It's moving, it's startling,so chilling it creeps
And always they tell you
"I loved this so much!"
And always they murmur
"My god. Oh, yuck."
Society is honeyed by sweet, smoothing words
Lest gears creak and rust tears us down
Who'm I to say that mankind can't learn?
That this world is a world upside-down?
Forgive me; I'm bitter.
For sometimes it's hard.
Reliving, it's litter
All trash to discard.
Now granted, like most else,
Your poems are good
You've poured in emotion
And stirred as you stood
But what makes a poem so different from others?
What deems this ditty so special and true?
Why did you spend time, not play with your brother?
What makes this poem so incredibly you?
Writing is unique to every one soul
And beauty is given as everyone's goal
Emotions and content; depictions and rhyme
I can't comprehend why you measure the time.
"A sloppy construction; I did in in haste!
But I'm leaving it here, might be good, just in case!"
Please tell me now why your bold revelation
Is a theme over-furnished in extreme presentation?
What makes the poem so incredibly you?
What takes the essence within?
What part is not just impossibly true
But also your own little spin?
Granted, it's been done
You can't find new words
Emotions elude you
You repeat what you've heard
But what of you then? And why do you write?
For sorrow, for loving, for hatred, for spite?
I love thougtful poems and admire inventions
But sometimes the writing brings absurd reprehension;
"This looks familiar, I saw it just now!
I'll scroll down a little and--wow!"
Please, make it special
From poet to poet
Each human's unique
And everyone knows it.
Spell out your poems with emotion and feeling
Avoid trite reliance on the words you've been reading
Write for your heart, not for applause
Make something Yours--
Don't submit to a cause.
~The Palatine Poet, Eternity's Lyre
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2004-01-30 03:15:19]
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Re: Relevant Discrepancies
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by kalika_vidya on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 07:21:45 AM AEST
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Aaaahaa..brother, this is sooo beautifully written..very very nice read..luv this poem
thank you for sharing this..K
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Re: Relevant Discrepancies
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 07:33:16 AM AEST
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I've never read anything quite like this, ever. I have felt like this at times, too. Ingenious poem, my friend...you have given me something to think about; and written a classic in the process.
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: Relevant Discrepancies
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by limpingunicorn on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 08:17:16 AM AEST
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Hi,
Offensive? Not a bit of it.. A large dose of reality can never go amiss.
Perceptive, analytical, didactic and amusing all at once - I'm impressed. |
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Re: Relevant Discrepancies
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by venkat on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 03:16:27 AM AEST
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Offencive..no..not at all..very enjoyaable and meaningful write..I appreciate your talent..
blessings.. venkat |
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Re: Relevant Discrepancies
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by emphaticplacebo on
Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 11:23:00 AM AEST
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| talk about a great poem! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this (thrice over!) and thinking about the message being sent. Its a great gift you have, to tap into peoples thoughts and allow them to gain an entirely new perspective, well done! |
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