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[aid] => mick
[title] => he found her in the flowers
[time] => 2004-01-28 21:04:51
[hometext] => she was as patient as a monument
[bodytext] => Exclaimed the Caterpillar,
"But he doesn't listen to me at all!"
Answered the Mongoose before he devoured her,
"Why should he when your at his beck and call?"
~*~
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he found her in the flowers
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Wednesday, 28th January 2004 @ 09:04:51 PM in AEST
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Exclaimed the Caterpillar,
"But he doesn't listen to me at all!"
Answered the Mongoose before he devoured her,
"Why should he when your at his beck and call?"
~*~
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Ilhar on
Wednesday, 28th January 2004 @ 10:14:15 PM AEST
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very interesting...i liked this one
Shari |
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Stalkee on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 08:33:01 AM AEST
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| hm, this was interesting and a little different =) (different being good here) good job |
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 01:13:15 PM AEST
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If ya make me think so hard I get a headache..lol ( looks for aspirin)
Well done
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 04:50:55 PM AEST
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| umm.. sorry, should have left a footnote{left the space but forgot the note lol}, this is not meant as a cute short poem or anything like that, but has a deeper hidden meaning, a symbolic message if you will... thanx, hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Necromant on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 07:02:52 PM AEST
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Hmm what a thoughful poem! ummm still didn't understand though *I'm dumb!* lol .........well something i understood, he ate her! Sad thing! Interesting write .....trying to find the meaning.......
Anne :D |
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Bongo on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 09:50:34 PM AEST
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Maybe words are exhausted
And feelings look distorted
Maybe dreams appear faded
And makes one feel jaded
Maybe life's timing
Has compromised plans most shining
Maybe the Mongoose has devoured
In tender moments allowed
Maybe at "Beck and Call"
Doubt that thought at all ! |
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Merry on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 07:57:33 PM AEST
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hmmmm a hidden meaning? you nessa? LOL I like this one and there is certainly a message in it......
merry |
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Yodo on
Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 11:29:50 PM AEST
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Is this like a relationship? Catapillar = Wive and Mongoose = Husband?
The wife is angry because her husband doesn't listen? And the husband just doesn't see her frustration, because she keeps up her act?
Catapillars turn into butterflies. Any link there? |
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 11:46:11 PM AEST
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nope nope, nobody close yet:P
~hugs n' love nessa
*sticks out tounge at merry* |
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Wrybod on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 12:07:04 PM AEST
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What's with this "your" in the last line, shouldn't it be you're...... and who doesn't listento the catapiller?
Now the Mongoose said "why should he (listen).....Who's he..............? and why did the Mongoose eat her ( who was as patient as a monument) or was it the catapillar that was devouered?
Case abandonned for lack of evidence
bob
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 05:27:13 PM AEST
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my morals as easy as pie,
beyond tangible words; symbols,
the answer is between the lines,
read each from title to copyrite,
the moral is really quite clear
so who will get it right?
~so far yodo is the closest, with the mention of the caterpillar link......................
~read with your heart not your eyes~
*abstract hint: the moral is a truth about love and life. |
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Yodo on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 06:17:19 PM AEST
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Note that catter-pillar(monument) has to stay very still for a long time to come out as a butterfly. Love changes like a butterfly.
This person who saw great beauty in the flowers (girl) won't listen to the catterpillar (love) because he has it under his thumb. So the butterfly never gets a chance to be, and love never fully blooms.
Eh? |
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Merry on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 10:20:06 PM AEST
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oh let me have another go at this one lmao - umm hmmmmm men are dense and we women wait and wait and wait for them to figure things out - but they never do so we turn into butterflies and fly off to sunny Jamaica for a holiday -- uh no that's no it....Oh dear! Ummmm
women watiing patiently, men who don't listen, women who are at a man's beck and call, so why should he listen when he gets what he wants anyway. Ummmmmm the mongoose is love?
Now I'm simply confusing myself....
Nessa I think you will have to write a much longer poem explaining this one - the Lady and the Mongoose or something like that. LMAO
merry
off to bed - my head hurts from thinking
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Yodo on
Wednesday, 4th February 2004 @ 01:06:35 AM AEST
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No no, the Catterpillar is love. The mongoose is inteligence. Or maybe the mind. Remember there's constant conflict between the brain and heart. Your intelect says one thing, and your heart says another. Essentialy, the mongoos has the power to destroy the catterpillar. The mind has the power to crush the heart, and thus prevent butterflies.
BAM! I got it. I must have. |
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Wrybod on
Wednesday, 4th February 2004 @ 05:27:21 AM AEST
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It seems to me that She i.e. the caterpiler i.e. the wiife is (typically) moaning (as usual) that her husband i.e.the mongoose, doesn't listen to her...but she remains patient.......
He, i.e. the mongoose, is a (typically) insensitive male who takes what he wants whenever he wants (by right)
The poem is a warning to young women that ...."If you want to be a butterfly, don't believe everything you read in the Old Testament"
bob
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by Cobalt on
Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 01:37:39 AM AEST
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| I like it... I'm just not sure what to make of it... It sorta made me laugh... I think I almost understand it... I think I'm wrong though. Lol. |
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Re: he found her in the flowers
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 24th November 2014 @ 09:26:03 PM AEST
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*smirk*
Point well taken. A little inspiration perhaps. Love it.
~Scorp |
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