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Array ( [sid] => 32891 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => The mental illness. [time] => 2004-01-27 15:04:53 [hometext] => One i wrote earlier, not about any one i know, but it still made me cry to write this! please coment on this even if you hate it! [bodytext] => in the slumber,
under the thunder,
going under,
lives a child,
mind's gone wild,
growing up,
is hard enough,
but living it up,
once he is grown up,
is far to tuff.

he shivers,
he quivers,
he is hurt in,
his liver,
he drinks him-self,
mad,
coz his brain always,
has been bad.

abused as a kid,
it makes you feel sick,
doesn't it?
abused as a kid,
his life was ****,
he was always told,
to live with it,
some where inside,
he thought he'd get through it,
some where outside,
he some how he knew it,
this was his life,
****** up with strife,
it wasn't fair,
that his dad wasn't there,
it wasn't right,
that his mum got in fights,
but this was his life!

just the bare fact alone,
of every night,
when his mum,
was back home,
from the pub,
she used to beat him hard,
she said she wanted him gone!

just the bare fact alone,
would be hard enough,
and now this mans mind,
is mentally mucked up!

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The mental illness.

Contributed by deathdrop on Tuesday, 27th January 2004 @ 03:04:53 PM in AEST
Topic: SongLyrics

in the slumber,
under the thunder,
going under,
lives a child,
mind's gone wild,
growing up,
is hard enough,
but living it up,
once he is grown up,
is far to tuff.

he shivers,
he quivers,
he is hurt in,
his liver,
he drinks him-self,
mad,
coz his brain always,
has been bad.

abused as a kid,
it makes you feel sick,
doesn't it?
abused as a kid,
his life was ****,
he was always told,
to live with it,
some where inside,
he thought he'd get through it,
some where outside,
he some how he knew it,
this was his life,
****** up with strife,
it wasn't fair,
that his dad wasn't there,
it wasn't right,
that his mum got in fights,
but this was his life!

just the bare fact alone,
of every night,
when his mum,
was back home,
from the pub,
she used to beat him hard,
she said she wanted him gone!

just the bare fact alone,
would be hard enough,
and now this mans mind,
is mentally mucked up!

Copyright © deathdrop ... [ 2004-01-27 15:04:53]
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Re: The mental illness. (User Rating: 1 )
by Necromant on Tuesday, 27th January 2004 @ 03:28:41 PM AEST
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Oh very very sad poem!!! I liked this style of writing this is one of your best writes! Very sad though! Keep writing!
Anne :D

Re: The mental illness. (User Rating: 1 )
by Cobalt on Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 11:45:50 PM AEST
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Wow... This was probably one of your more powerful writes... This one hit really hard... I liked it... Ouch though.

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