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[aid] => mick
[title] => Dream or not?
[time] => 2004-01-22 08:57:42
[hometext] => Another attempt to dark poetry, coments welcome :p
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Moving with supernatural agility he grabbed her hair,
She didn’t detect him coming, no time to prepare,
Turning to look at his scarred face, she saw no mercy,
She felt hands tracing her body, breath becoming jerky
Pain erupted from her leg, as his knife dug into her flesh,
He stripped her and locked their bodies in a perfect mesh,
Hopeless she resigned to her fate, lying there on the floor,
But nothing happened; she woke up at the sound of the door,
Was it a dream? Or was it real? Looking down at her leg she screamed,
A small scar spotted her leg; nothing was as unreal as it seemed!
[comments] => 10
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[topic] => 13
[informant] => Necromant
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[acomm] => 0
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[score] => 20
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => DarkPoetry
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Dream or not?
Contributed by
Necromant
on
Thursday, 22nd January 2004 @ 08:57:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Moving with supernatural agility he grabbed her hair,
She didn’t detect him coming, no time to prepare,
Turning to look at his scarred face, she saw no mercy,
She felt hands tracing her body, breath becoming jerky
Pain erupted from her leg, as his knife dug into her flesh,
He stripped her and locked their bodies in a perfect mesh,
Hopeless she resigned to her fate, lying there on the floor,
But nothing happened; she woke up at the sound of the door,
Was it a dream? Or was it real? Looking down at her leg she screamed,
A small scar spotted her leg; nothing was as unreal as it seemed!
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Re: Dream or not?
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by forever_lonely on
Thursday, 22nd January 2004 @ 01:51:40 PM AEST
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absolutely brilliant anne
a master of language
i left as if i was there feeling what she was feeling
my heart was beating with hers
truely amazing anne a talent not to be lost
Luke |
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Re: Dream or not?
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by whisper-of-night on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 04:02:50 PM AEST
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.....Looking down at her leg she screamed, a small scar spotted her leg; nothing was as unreal as it seemed! 'Arhhh!' She screamed again and shivers! 'Hey hey! Are you ok? Look at me! Look at me!' Opened her eys, she saw a worried face right in front of her; 'You been dreaming again! Ohhhh Anne, too much of horror films and dark poems got to your head! But don't be scared, I am here now... I am here now.........' It is him, the Whisper-of-night. Anne sigh with relief, closed her eyes, listen to the gentle whispers, and slowly she fall into a sound sleep......
Hehe, how do you like it end this way? ^_^ |
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Re: Dream or not?
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 04:22:21 PM AEST
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| WOW! I wouldn't mind to have a dream like that...It will be never forgotten. Just hope the scar will dissapear somehow!:) Cool ! VanyaT |
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Re: Dream or not?
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th January 2004 @ 02:56:18 PM AEST
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| it was thrilling reading through. hope i dont have a dream like that. it was a very good try. i liked it. |
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Re: Dream or not?
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 9th February 2004 @ 10:18:11 PM AEST
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| i would say the 'attempt' was actually a vividly image filled well written bit of darkness, keep writing:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Dream or not?
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by Cobalt on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 09:35:45 PM AEST
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| Very good. I enjoyed this. It was a bit odd though to me for some reason. |
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Re: Dream or not?
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by Bunni on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 06:53:53 PM AEST
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I thought this was really interesting, ya know? I mean, to think about if it really *was* real or not.
I absolutely loved it. |
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Re: Dream or not?
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st April 2004 @ 04:06:32 PM AEST
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very good well worth a read and a comment!
wildejohnny. |
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Re: Dream or not?
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by arden on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 11:32:49 AM AEST
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very cool, somewhat chilling and dark. i really like this. wonderfully done. keep it up.
Arden |
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Re: Dream or not?
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 10:58:36 PM AEST
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| excellent write. the twist isnt original but it still leaves one to wonder. =] |
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