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thrown away
Contributed by
fallensilence
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Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 04:14:53 PM in AEST
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MiscPoems
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give me a chance to throw away all reason
you led me through the path that led to love
but threw me away as i neared the end
with the blindfold off i find my eyes are blinded still
give me a choice to see what i am missing
this moment was preceded by a lifetime
and it still seems like eons before i'm finally with you .
just know that i am still on my way
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2004-01-16 16:14:53] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: thrown away
(User Rating: 1 ) by tease_whizz on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 08:00:26 PM AEST (User
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honestly don't think this needs editing at all. it flows well and the use of time really adds to the sense of longing. i found the final line really moving. x kate x |
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Re: thrown away
(User Rating: 1 ) by Cobalt on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 04:56:53 PM AEST (User
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I agree completely this does not need editing. It was very good. |
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