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Array ( [sid] => 30447 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => We Were Gold [time] => 2003-12-30 22:31:31 [hometext] => This is the 1st poem I've been inspired to right and I just wanted some feedback on it... [bodytext] => What happened to the best friend I had?
You never used to make me this sad...
You say you're always there, but I cant see
anyone that could understand a word out of me.
I think of some of the times we shared
and how you got me to belive you cared.
You had 3 chances, results always the same.
I think I'll pass on the 4th serving of pain.
Remember when I told you "I'll be everything you need"?
but you just left my heart there to bleed.
I used to think we'd always be friend,
but now I'm not sure how this story ends.
My fantasies used to be the same
You in my arms. Me taking away your pain.
We were gold, but now we're through.
Never forget, I would have done anything for you... [comments] => 5 [counter] => 169 [topic] => 55 [informant] => Kuckus [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => dedicatedpoems )

We Were Gold

Contributed by Kuckus on Tuesday, 30th December 2003 @ 10:31:31 PM in AEST
Topic: dedicatedpoems

What happened to the best friend I had?
You never used to make me this sad...
You say you're always there, but I cant see
anyone that could understand a word out of me.
I think of some of the times we shared
and how you got me to belive you cared.
You had 3 chances, results always the same.
I think I'll pass on the 4th serving of pain.
Remember when I told you "I'll be everything you need"?
but you just left my heart there to bleed.
I used to think we'd always be friend,
but now I'm not sure how this story ends.
My fantasies used to be the same
You in my arms. Me taking away your pain.
We were gold, but now we're through.
Never forget, I would have done anything for you...

Copyright © Kuckus ... [ 2003-12-30 22:31:31]
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Re: We Were Gold (User Rating: 1 )
by Chadene_Gillespie on Tuesday, 30th December 2003 @ 10:47:29 PM AEST
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Not a bad poem, but it kind of shows immaturity it lacks real substance, but overall a good job.

Re: We Were Gold (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Tuesday, 30th December 2003 @ 11:55:36 PM AEST
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Very well done!
Great for a first write!
peace, joy, luv,
emy

Re: We Were Gold (User Rating: 1 )
by Cobalt on Wednesday, 31st December 2003 @ 01:06:37 AM AEST
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Shut your mouth Chadene. I see no immaturity in it. I liked this very much. It was a good write. I think I can understand this very well. The emotions are well conveyed.

Re: We Were Gold (User Rating: 1 )
by EmSal on Wednesday, 31st December 2003 @ 05:36:38 AM AEST
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I really liked the write - been there done that. Awesome write...what is with your name...? :)

Emma.

Re: We Were Gold (User Rating: 1 )
by venkat on Wednesday, 31st December 2003 @ 05:39:55 AM AEST
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what more do you want..you have expressed your self neatly..talent may vary from person to person..it is a good write.. venkat

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