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RITE OF PASSAGE
Contributed by
jaeann
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Wednesday, 24th December 2003 @ 03:03:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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give me some time
to ease my mind
to settle in
and peace i'll find
walk up my path
among the fallen ones
lay down the rose
as tears have begun
and remember a place
when all was so perfect
a future was traced
now all there is
a small marked stone
the name of an angel
chills to the bone
the erasure of time
is a tricky friend
only leaves you the loss
as the brightness begins
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2003-12-24 15:03:44] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: RITE OF PASSAGE
(User Rating: 1 ) by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 24th December 2003 @ 09:17:48 PM AEST (User
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Dear Jaymee.
Death is a horrible plague for all mankind.
We weren't suppose to die and leave our loved ones behind!
Time is indeed tricky, and leaves you with the empty loss.....and when all is said and done....you are the one that pays the cost! When your tears run dry, and you can barely move.....it's true when the brightness appears...all that's left is just you!
I would hold you tightly Jaymee if only I could.
I'm looking back now upon many years of good....someday, perhaps years...you will writing another and comfort their tears..
That's all we ever learn from death Jaymee is how to comfort another because we know all of Death's fears!
Warm Love and Warm Hugs
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Re: RITE OF PASSAGE
(User Rating: 1 ) by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 25th December 2003 @ 01:51:45 AM AEST (User
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this was sad although very good. I don't understand the whole 'erasure of time' thing, but a good poem nonetheless.
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Re: RITE OF PASSAGE
(User Rating: 1 ) by Stitch on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 05:11:53 PM AEST (User
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I can definitely relate to this. I have had to start over so many times. The pain of what happened is apparent. The grieving quietly expressed. This is lovely.
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Re: RITE OF PASSAGE
(User Rating: 1 ) by Rhei76 on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 05:33:35 PM AEST (User
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Sounds like Awaking from reality
to feel the boudaries and how they fade
where lose is gain and gain is gone
when you open up, what you take in
must also be delievered out
it's a transition most don't see
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