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Array ( [sid] => 29266 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Your Perfect Sky [time] => 2003-12-13 02:21:16 [hometext] => i wasn't sure where to put it. its sort of love, sort of grief.... but not lost love persay. i dont know that much yet. [bodytext] => in the dawn of this era
this black eon of black holes
tears twinkle in the heavens
and stars fall in downpours
and as you examine and reach out
and replace and repair each star
i wonder, where will mine be?
will it hide behind another star,
or only be visible in the heartbeat before the dawn
i have a fear that my star will lose
my wishes in the great shuffle
or that it will dim
but that, i know, is no longer in my hands
and despite the fear
i still desire
your perfect sky [comments] => 4 [counter] => 284 [topic] => 39 [informant] => AzurePaladin [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 10 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => Grief )

Your Perfect Sky

Contributed by AzurePaladin on Saturday, 13th December 2003 @ 02:21:16 AM in AEST
Topic: Grief

in the dawn of this era
this black eon of black holes
tears twinkle in the heavens
and stars fall in downpours
and as you examine and reach out
and replace and repair each star
i wonder, where will mine be?
will it hide behind another star,
or only be visible in the heartbeat before the dawn
i have a fear that my star will lose
my wishes in the great shuffle
or that it will dim
but that, i know, is no longer in my hands
and despite the fear
i still desire
your perfect sky

Copyright © AzurePaladin ... [ 2003-12-13 02:21:16]
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Re: Your Perfect Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by 13Hopes on Saturday, 13th December 2003 @ 02:32:18 AM AEST
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I Like It...

Cheers
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Re: Your Perfect Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by desertrose on Saturday, 13th December 2003 @ 02:36:02 AM AEST
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Really heart felt poem Great flow

Rose
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Re: Your Perfect Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by Fionndruinne on Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 10:57:50 PM AEST
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May your sky be perfect. Beautiful job.
Blessings

Re: Your Perfect Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by Ethereal_Engine on Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 04:29:25 PM AEST
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Yeah...I have a similar feeling sometimes, but not as deep and encomposing as this poem. Many times I feel like I am being swept away in a great wave made up of the works, dreams, songs, fears, hopes, and what not of people. the wave is so vast, so powerful and rapid paced, that few stop or at least slow down to admire those hopes, dreams, songs, etc. that all those people took the time to make, poured thier souls into, in hopes of getting some kind of feedback, recognition, or a mere comment on their creations. I usually feel that way on Acid Planet because like the wave, many many people are involved and its hard sometimes to get a glimpse of everything. I like the poem, and im not just saying that, you use a cool sounding metaphore about stars representing people and an eon of black holes. Space is another mystery that Ive taken a fair amount of interest in ^^. Must you write about sad things? not that I have a very big refrence to go by cause I only read 3 so far, but they've been so sad...being overshadowed and fading away is really sad....

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