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Array ( [sid] => 28728 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => workin progress [time] => 2003-12-06 11:49:21 [hometext] => this is what i'm working on now tell me wha tyou think so far (all subject to change) [bodytext] => Chips on the blade
And blood stains your shoes
You left your knife in my back
And you left your heart on your sleeve

And the butterflies and bullets
Count it out
(count them out)
Like the notches in your headboard

Dagger in my heart
And the medication in my stomach
Self prescribed perfection

Your face in the pond
Your voice on the radio
All ways chasing a ghost
All ways chasing after you
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workin progress

Contributed by TaintedOptomist on Saturday, 6th December 2003 @ 11:49:21 AM in AEST
Topic: oops

Chips on the blade
And blood stains your shoes
You left your knife in my back
And you left your heart on your sleeve

And the butterflies and bullets
Count it out
(count them out)
Like the notches in your headboard

Dagger in my heart
And the medication in my stomach
Self prescribed perfection

Your face in the pond
Your voice on the radio
All ways chasing a ghost
All ways chasing after you

Copyright © TaintedOptomist ... [ 2003-12-06 11:49:21]
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Re: workin progress (User Rating: 1 )
by Cobalt on Saturday, 6th December 2003 @ 01:05:01 PM AEST
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I thought this was a cool write. I even think the title worked perfectly lol.

Re: workin progress (User Rating: 1 )
by Wrybod on Wednesday, 10th December 2003 @ 01:11:19 PM AEST
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Took me several lines to get into it I think I would habvve done better if I'd read the last verse first.

The poem certainly doesn't pull it's punches

It's good but I can only suggest putting the .last verse first (for the dim souls like me)

bob

Re: workin progress (User Rating: 1 )
by Wrybod on Wednesday, 10th December 2003 @ 01:13:08 PM AEST
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Took me several lines to get into it I think I would have done better if I'd read the last verse first.

The poem certainly doesn't pull it's punches

It's good but I can only suggest putting the .last verse first (for the dim souls like me)

bob

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