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Empathy
Contributed by
Ash
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Saturday, 8th November 2003 @ 03:33:07 PM in AEST
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InspirationalPoems
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Lost and lonely, that's how I found you.
Asking if you'll live until tomorrow?
Self loathing, tearing you in two...
You were, Drowning in agonizing sorrow.
Pain, fear, ripping you apart, too strong..
To strong to admit the hole inside.
Ask yourself, where did I go wrong?
When was the last time that you cried?
There's nothing wrong with tears
Everyone gets lost on this road
Everbodies got their secret fears
Everyone feels their soul erode
You're not alone...
I can see the pain in your eyes
I can feel the sorrow that consumes
I am deafened by your silent cries
Your secret fears I will exhume
Copyright ©
Ash
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2003-11-08 15:33:07] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Empathy
(User Rating: 1 ) by Cora-Windover on
Saturday, 8th November 2003 @ 04:11:53 PM AEST (User
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I like it alot. It actually has a point (=^..^=) and, unlike many poems of this nature, it pays careful attention to meter and rhyme.
I especially like the lines: There's nothing wrong with tears, and Everyone feels their soul erode. Awesome.
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Re: Empathy
(User Rating: 1 ) by WiLlYwOnKa on
Saturday, 8th November 2003 @ 05:29:11 PM AEST (User
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The whole entire poem is just excellent! You have great writing skills! |
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Re: Empathy
(User Rating: 1 ) by BrghtNSnshny on
Saturday, 8th November 2003 @ 07:56:01 PM AEST (User
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So many people are like that, most everyone is at one point or another...it is ok to cry. I really like the 2nd "paragraph" in it.
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