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She made it to the back door by creeping against the wall
And as she put the gun against her chest
She whispered 'Thank God, I'll finally rest'

Theres no saving her, whats done here is done
Its all to the thnks of her dads old shotgun
Some of her friends have just started to care
And it makes you wonder, 'Is God really there?'

As her stricken family and friends cry
"Why did she feel she had to die?"
"Was something wrong?" "Was it me?"
"Or was there a problem no one can see?"

Yes there was and it lay at the heart
Her trust was broken and it tore her apart
My problem, you see, is just the same
So I'm going to play at her very same game

So as I put this gun against my chest
To put myself at eternal rest
I'd like to say, this is the end
My meaning gone, goodbye my friend

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Eternal rest

Contributed by Bohemian_with_a_pen on Wednesday, 1st October 2003 @ 04:45:00 PM in AEST
Topic: Suicide

She slid out of her bedroom and tiptoed down the hall
She made it to the back door by creeping against the wall
And as she put the gun against her chest
She whispered 'Thank God, I'll finally rest'

Theres no saving her, whats done here is done
Its all to the thnks of her dads old shotgun
Some of her friends have just started to care
And it makes you wonder, 'Is God really there?'

As her stricken family and friends cry
"Why did she feel she had to die?"
"Was something wrong?" "Was it me?"
"Or was there a problem no one can see?"

Yes there was and it lay at the heart
Her trust was broken and it tore her apart
My problem, you see, is just the same
So I'm going to play at her very same game

So as I put this gun against my chest
To put myself at eternal rest
I'd like to say, this is the end
My meaning gone, goodbye my friend

Copyright © Bohemian_with_a_pen ... [ 2003-10-01 16:45:00]
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Re: Eternal rest (User Rating: 1 )
by sicknivesevered on Wednesday, 1st October 2003 @ 07:36:33 PM AEST
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Run if you wish, but I'd rather beat the ***** out of my problems. Stick in there and rule all in your wake. Good write, all the same.

Re: Eternal rest (User Rating: 1 )
by LovingWhispers on Wednesday, 1st October 2003 @ 08:27:04 PM AEST
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At this moment,I could say..yep Im with ya,But then my love for life and what the next moment can bring kicks in.Be good to yourself...stick around,you may like what you find.

Re: Eternal rest (User Rating: 1 )
by PsykoticDoll on Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 09:51:22 PM AEST
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Another beautiful write. I can never make everything sound right when I am trying to rhyme things but you let it roll so smoothly. Excellent!

Re: Eternal rest (User Rating: 1 )
by tormentedpixie on Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 01:23:03 PM AEST
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Very very nicely done! i love it! thanks for commentin..b/c if u didn't I woudn't have ever read this! Great work!!!! ^_^

Re: Eternal rest (User Rating: 1 )
by assassinatorgirl on Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 12:15:33 AM AEST
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very sad and sometimes i feel like being that girl and going to eternal rest, but i don't. i live for people. and i always have wondered about a god being there or not. awesome poem!

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