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Thunder crashed, lightning flashed
Shivering in the green grass.
Under that weeping willow tree,
All she wanted was to be happy.

Suffering, she’s all alone,
Shivering on her own.
Water rushing from the sky,
Time slowly passing by.

Filled with grace, yet no hope,
How could anyone ever cope?
A mist rises like a curtain being drawn,
What did she ever do wrong?

Broken and torn, shredded and tossed.
Look what you did, look what you lost.
Heaven is bleeding, the angels are crying.
Is this what it feels like dying?

Choking on ashes, choking on tears,
Looking into the broken shattered mirrors.
Images of yesterday are hidden.
Images of tomorrow are forbidden.

Shredded and torn,
The look of being worn,
How can she live like this?
In utter unhappiness?

I hope she can find her way,
Towards a brighter happier day.
You think you know her, you have no idea.
You don’t know what’s going on inside her head,
When you think she’s telling the truth,
Its really a lie, and you have no idea,
That it’s really a lie.
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shredded and torn

Contributed by frozensuicide on Monday, 29th September 2003 @ 10:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic: SadPoetry

Shredded and torn

Thunder crashed, lightning flashed
Shivering in the green grass.
Under that weeping willow tree,
All she wanted was to be happy.

Suffering, she’s all alone,
Shivering on her own.
Water rushing from the sky,
Time slowly passing by.

Filled with grace, yet no hope,
How could anyone ever cope?
A mist rises like a curtain being drawn,
What did she ever do wrong?

Broken and torn, shredded and tossed.
Look what you did, look what you lost.
Heaven is bleeding, the angels are crying.
Is this what it feels like dying?

Choking on ashes, choking on tears,
Looking into the broken shattered mirrors.
Images of yesterday are hidden.
Images of tomorrow are forbidden.

Shredded and torn,
The look of being worn,
How can she live like this?
In utter unhappiness?

I hope she can find her way,
Towards a brighter happier day.
You think you know her, you have no idea.
You don’t know what’s going on inside her head,
When you think she’s telling the truth,
Its really a lie, and you have no idea,
That it’s really a lie.

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Re: shredded and torn (User Rating: 1 )
by garyh on Monday, 29th September 2003 @ 11:06:52 PM AEST
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good write... but a very very sad story... i hope everything worked out fine with her... if not...... im so very sorry....

im glad you can release your feelings through writing though... something i wish more people would take up... it would be a better world if they did.

Re: shredded and torn (User Rating: 1 )
by bobotheclown on Tuesday, 30th September 2003 @ 10:35:02 PM AEST
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I loved this Lelu reminded me of a System of a Down song. I hope this wasn't about you and if it was I hope you are feeling better now. Once again I loved this hope to see more stuff from you soon.

Peace,
Bobo (Joel)

Re: shredded and torn (User Rating: 1 )
by Saira on Wednesday, 1st October 2003 @ 05:49:15 PM AEST
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Very sad and touchy but wow how beautifully you have portrayed everything in this oh so well written poem. Loved it! I hope everything works out for her perfectly alright and she be happy evermore.
Saira

Re: shredded and torn (User Rating: 0 )
by Former_Member on Wednesday, 1st October 2003 @ 07:59:30 PM AEST
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thats a great poem... i know how it feels to be like that... i was there before. But things always get worse before they get better.
But things will get better

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