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Array ( [sid] => 23175 [catid] => 1 [aid] => Mick [title] => Breathe [time] => 2003-09-13 18:45:00 [hometext] => One of my darker poems that talks of deformed figures, supernatural weeping trees sprouting from pools of blood, and a plea for a dead friend to return. Yes, I am deranged, thank you. [bodytext] => Something placid lies on the floor
I'd like to think it a person
But those features are too distorted
So grotesque but beautiful to me
And it cries a soundless rivulet of raven tears
So eerily it sheds these black droplets
black as the night, black as the fall -
so quiescent it is for a moment
too silent that silence itself cannot be heard
then they erupt - what are they?
Dark branches sprouting from the tiny pools
Repulsive trees of the dark, bearing leaves
With nebulous faces, all wailing
All pleading for release, they
Just want to *breathe*.
Can't we breathe?
No time, no time
The earth is doomed to spin too fast
Shall we suffocate?
Yes, yes, yes
And in the process
I'll try...to breathe...life...into you...

Because if you breathe,
If I can see you breathe again,
I will be content
Even in death
Even in death
My friend.

[comments] => 8 [counter] => 161 [topic] => 13 [informant] => Avarice_Riot [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )
Breathe

Contributed by Avarice_Riot on Saturday, 13th September 2003 @ 06:45:00 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry



Something placid lies on the floor
I'd like to think it a person
But those features are too distorted
So grotesque but beautiful to me
And it cries a soundless rivulet of raven tears
So eerily it sheds these black droplets
black as the night, black as the fall -
so quiescent it is for a moment
too silent that silence itself cannot be heard
then they erupt - what are they?
Dark branches sprouting from the tiny pools
Repulsive trees of the dark, bearing leaves
With nebulous faces, all wailing
All pleading for release, they
Just want to *breathe*.
Can't we breathe?
No time, no time
The earth is doomed to spin too fast
Shall we suffocate?
Yes, yes, yes
And in the process
I'll try...to breathe...life...into you...

Because if you breathe,
If I can see you breathe again,
I will be content
Even in death
Even in death
My friend.





Copyright © Avarice_Riot ... [ 2003-09-13 18:45:00]
(Date/Time posted on site)





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Re: Breathe (User Rating: 1 )
by bobotheclown on Saturday, 13th September 2003 @ 07:20:08 PM AEST
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this was amazing...

Bobo (Joel)


Re: Breathe (User Rating: 1 )
by MoonlitAngel on Saturday, 13th September 2003 @ 11:39:43 PM AEST
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"too silent that silence itself cannot be heard"

Great stuff!

~ Moonlit


Re: Breathe (User Rating: 1 )
by Ronald on Sunday, 14th September 2003 @ 02:01:09 AM AEST
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Breathe... Wow! I know a lot of songs with that title and now my my pal here has a poem entitled Breathe... Hey, I have a poem with that title too! Breathe... nice title

And your poetry is just great. You paint the picture vividly with your words. I like the way you use your words. Great piece of art over here! Keep the going going pal!


Re: Breathe (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Sunday, 14th September 2003 @ 03:26:25 AM AEST
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vivid details to this poem I understand this moe than you know.Enjoyed reading it!
michelle


Re: Breathe (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 14th September 2003 @ 05:57:52 AM AEST
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You are a awesome poet. Truly amazing. Great poem.


Re: Breathe (User Rating: 0 )
by Former_Member on Wednesday, 17th September 2003 @ 01:59:16 PM AEST
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"The earth is doomed to spin too fast"
great write...


Re: Breathe (User Rating: 1 )
by SensitiveSoAbused on Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 03:10:14 AM AEST
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icy you have many more comments then me. you must be a better poet.

but seriously folks,
the peice? i enjoyed it, very inquisitive, probing , kind of anguished...


cheers,
C+


Re: Breathe (User Rating: 1 )
by wyrd_faerie on Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 10:42:08 AM AEST
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All pleading for release, they
Just want to *breathe*.
Can't we breathe?
No time, no time
The earth is doomed to spin too fast
Shall we suffocate?
Yes, yes, yes
And in the process
I'll try...to breathe...life...into you...


f****** excellent.




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