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The stars twinkle across the clear sky
Emanating beauty and mystery
A young girl, so innocent
Twirls around, her cherubic face
Tilted heavenward, full of life
Hasn't had any empty promises
Hasn't lost her first love
Her eyes sparkle she's an angel
Her smile fills and radiates a room
She's so innocent never tiring of life

She lifts a tiny hand up
As if she can grab a star and taste it
Daddy is behind her full of anger
He lost his job you see
He has to vent on the nearest thing
He grabs her shoulder and spins her around
She goes to bury her head into his chest,
But daddy isn't full of play tonight
He glares at her, pushes her away,
Slaps her stunned face

Inside no one can hear her cries
Except for this sadistic man
Pleasured by one so innocent
He doesn't care glares at her tears
Abuses her again and again
Tosses her on the floor
Like a used rag
And oh she's bleeding and confused
Tears are falling thick and swift
Doesn't know why she was treated that way

Outside a falling star plummets to earth
Where another star has been lost
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Star

Contributed by bobotheclown on Saturday, 9th August 2003 @ 08:25:00 AM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry

The stars twinkle across the clear sky
Emanating beauty and mystery
A young girl, so innocent
Twirls around, her cherubic face
Tilted heavenward, full of life
Hasn't had any empty promises
Hasn't lost her first love
Her eyes sparkle she's an angel
Her smile fills and radiates a room
She's so innocent never tiring of life

She lifts a tiny hand up
As if she can grab a star and taste it
Daddy is behind her full of anger
He lost his job you see
He has to vent on the nearest thing
He grabs her shoulder and spins her around
She goes to bury her head into his chest,
But daddy isn't full of play tonight
He glares at her, pushes her away,
Slaps her stunned face

Inside no one can hear her cries
Except for this sadistic man
Pleasured by one so innocent
He doesn't care glares at her tears
Abuses her again and again
Tosses her on the floor
Like a used rag
And oh she's bleeding and confused
Tears are falling thick and swift
Doesn't know why she was treated that way

Outside a falling star plummets to earth
Where another star has been lost

Copyright © bobotheclown ... [ 2003-08-09 08:25:00]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Star (User Rating: 1 )
by Ilhar on Saturday, 9th August 2003 @ 11:14:38 AM AEST
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Joel,
Well done a very good write.
Shari

Re: Star (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Saturday, 9th August 2003 @ 02:20:28 PM AEST
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dearest joel, you have taken a very sad subject and written a very beautiful and powerful message in this poem, it should be read by all, hugs n' love nessa

Re: Star (User Rating: 1 )
by jaeann on Saturday, 9th August 2003 @ 03:49:08 PM AEST
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what a beautiful message........the words hit home my friend........really well written!!!

Re: Star (User Rating: 1 )
by PsychoticDreamz on Saturday, 9th August 2003 @ 06:04:19 PM AEST
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Hey Joel,

For never writing something like this before it sure turned out very well. I really liked the two last lines, Great job!

*_-Psych-_*

Re: Star (User Rating: 1 )
by hardcoreputa on Saturday, 9th August 2003 @ 06:50:22 PM AEST
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my eyes are watering right now, it just makes me think of my past and everything, a very beautiful poem, it touched me a lot, filled with many emotions... an awsome write... keep it up ~Apryl

Re: Star (User Rating: 1 )
by Chanti on Monday, 11th August 2003 @ 06:46:44 PM AEST
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Joel, beautiful write. I had to read it over and over to hold on to the powerful words. I loved it. Im in awe.

- Chanti - - *

Re: Star (User Rating: 1 )
by Jason_Robert_Britt on Wednesday, 13th August 2003 @ 06:27:16 AM AEST
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Way to step into someone else's shoes... your story was well recieved... great job.

Re: Star (User Rating: 1 )
by BABYGIRLAL28 on Thursday, 28th August 2003 @ 03:19:34 PM AEST
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SO SAD ; BUT TRUE..THIS HAPPEN'S EVERYDAY..BUT THIS IS REALLY GOOD KEEP WRITTING..ALLISON

Re: Star (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 06:02:34 AM AEST
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Joel - I just came across this poem and I believe it is a very beautiful, deep and emotional write. So very well written for your first attempt at a poem like this. No matter what you write your poems always leave me speechless. Just amazing and a very sincere write...
Stacey

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