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[aid] => mick
[title] => Broken
[time] => 2002-08-12 06:25:09
[hometext] => Yesterday, today, tomorrow, tearing away to many.
[bodytext] => Cut and bruised,
Taped and torn,
Hidden away from the world and she’s worn.
Clouding out is the fear inside,
An innocent girl should have nothing to hide.
Remembers his smell,
Remembers his taste,
As a single tear runs down her face.
Bound and frightened,
Poisoned inside and wondering why,
A slave to a captor,
Whose black heart had bled dry.
He whispered to her “you’ll always see me”
And she would, she’s opened.
He screams in her mind “you’ll always feel me”
And she would, she’s broken.
Scrapes on the knees,
Blood stains the ground,
Prays she could cry out,
But can’t utter a sound.
Tape covers her mouth,
And her lips wet through,
It turns out that nightmares,
Can sometimes come true.
Time rolls around slowly,
And she’s unsure of what follows,
Feels hate and feels dirty,
But mostly feels hollowed.
A creaking door lets the light seep in,
As a sickening touch brings her more pain,
Opens up a new wound,
And then pours in the shame.
He whispered to her “you’ll always see me”
And she would, she’s opened.
He screams in her mind “you’ll always feel me”
And she would, she’s broken.
Now he’s used her up and she’s emptied,
Taking a little more of her life from her each day,
And left her trapped there to be found,
Or perhaps to wilt and fade away.
She wants to peel away her skin,
It feels decayed and blackened,
She just closes her eyes sometimes,
And floats to the place where this couldn’t happen.
Though these scars are there for life,
Or that’s how it would seem,
Yet another soul has been shattered,
By hate and by bad dreams.
Yet a passer by had heard her cries,
Forced the door wondering what the noise could be,
After she’d given up over and over,
Finally she made it free.
He whispered to her “you’ll always see me”
And she would, she’s opened.
He screams in her mind “you’ll always feel me”
And she would, she’s broken.
Back home with support,
And the care of the people that love her,
But they can’t feel what she had been through,
Or know how much she had suffered.
Now locks herself away from the world,
Wishing that nothing was real,
Leaving her family crushed and weeping,
And not knowing how to deal.
Afraid to walk alone,
Cries and puts blame on herself,
Tainted inside to out,
An empty shell that mere words just cannot help.
Now she’s falling and she’s drifting,
Surrounded by burning rain,
Pained and living a life,
That she can never feel safe in again.
Every day she still can hear his voice,
She always would, although she’s coping,
Every hour she feels the hurt inside for others like her,
Who have been and will be broken.
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Broken
Contributed by
Damon_Maynard
on
Monday, 12th August 2002 @ 06:25:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
StoryPoetry
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Cut and bruised,
Taped and torn,
Hidden away from the world and she’s worn.
Clouding out is the fear inside,
An innocent girl should have nothing to hide.
Remembers his smell,
Remembers his taste,
As a single tear runs down her face.
Bound and frightened,
Poisoned inside and wondering why,
A slave to a captor,
Whose black heart had bled dry.
He whispered to her “you’ll always see me”
And she would, she’s opened.
He screams in her mind “you’ll always feel me”
And she would, she’s broken.
Scrapes on the knees,
Blood stains the ground,
Prays she could cry out,
But can’t utter a sound.
Tape covers her mouth,
And her lips wet through,
It turns out that nightmares,
Can sometimes come true.
Time rolls around slowly,
And she’s unsure of what follows,
Feels hate and feels dirty,
But mostly feels hollowed.
A creaking door lets the light seep in,
As a sickening touch brings her more pain,
Opens up a new wound,
And then pours in the shame.
He whispered to her “you’ll always see me”
And she would, she’s opened.
He screams in her mind “you’ll always feel me”
And she would, she’s broken.
Now he’s used her up and she’s emptied,
Taking a little more of her life from her each day,
And left her trapped there to be found,
Or perhaps to wilt and fade away.
She wants to peel away her skin,
It feels decayed and blackened,
She just closes her eyes sometimes,
And floats to the place where this couldn’t happen.
Though these scars are there for life,
Or that’s how it would seem,
Yet another soul has been shattered,
By hate and by bad dreams.
Yet a passer by had heard her cries,
Forced the door wondering what the noise could be,
After she’d given up over and over,
Finally she made it free.
He whispered to her “you’ll always see me”
And she would, she’s opened.
He screams in her mind “you’ll always feel me”
And she would, she’s broken.
Back home with support,
And the care of the people that love her,
But they can’t feel what she had been through,
Or know how much she had suffered.
Now locks herself away from the world,
Wishing that nothing was real,
Leaving her family crushed and weeping,
And not knowing how to deal.
Afraid to walk alone,
Cries and puts blame on herself,
Tainted inside to out,
An empty shell that mere words just cannot help.
Now she’s falling and she’s drifting,
Surrounded by burning rain,
Pained and living a life,
That she can never feel safe in again.
Every day she still can hear his voice,
She always would, although she’s coping,
Every hour she feels the hurt inside for others like her,
Who have been and will be broken.
Copyright ©
Damon_Maynard
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Re: Broken
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Monday, 12th August 2002 @ 06:44:04 AM AEST
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Wow.. I don't know exactly what to say. This is very, very good. I wish nobody would ever feel her pain. That is just so sad. And the even more sad thing, is that this happens. I can feel her pain.
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
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Damon,
This hurts to read but it is very well written...pulls you right in and grips till the end...
Great Write...
Always,
Dani
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by orgygirl on
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| You had all of my attention throughout this poem.. brilliant. |
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by Suzy on
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This is an awesome write..unfortunately it is so true....loved this one...
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Wednesday, 21st August 2002 @ 02:54:06 PM AEST
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| All I can say is amazing! You can almost feel her pain, yet have no idea what it must have felt like. Simply amazing!!! |
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| All I can say is amazing! You can almost feel her pain, yet have no idea what it must have felt like. Simply amazing!!! |
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by MnMnMsrcool on
Thursday, 29th August 2002 @ 01:19:27 PM AEST
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| that was so good! you could really feel what she felt and the way you said everything....it was said very well. it ws very very good keep writing |
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by Chrissie on
Sunday, 22nd September 2002 @ 08:51:29 AM AEST
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I want to say so much about this exceptional piece of writing but I've been rendered a bit speechless....I've read much of your work and enjoyed it but this has moved me to the core....be proud of it .
Chrissie |
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| Now that I've read even more of your work I am disarmed by it. Your words are powerful, well-structured and image-evoking. And amazingly, you keep a rhyme scheme flowing freely through it like water. Truly wonderful work. Thank you! |
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by Fwog on
Monday, 21st October 2002 @ 11:08:02 PM AEST
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So sad and so real.
In my work I come across this too often.
You have captured this in almost "still life".
Congratulations damon. |
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by Twinky on
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| i am crying now as i have just finished reading probably the saddest poem ever, it hurts to know that this does happen all the time! it was very well written and whether you are writing from personal experiance or not you havbe a gift and i hope to read more poetry of your soon. |
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by rockshv on
Thursday, 31st October 2002 @ 03:45:29 PM AEST
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wow!!!!!! amazingly written.. i can relate to it very much it is so horrible for women to go thhrough such a tramatic event....
kita |
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by Former_Member on
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| What an incredible, vivid write. |
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th January 2003 @ 06:58:36 PM AEST
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| That was so good!! it was so real and just reading it made me hurt. Ive seen woman go through those kind of things, but they never put it together like you did, awesome!! |
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| Usally When I See Any Writing About A Broken Heart I Can't Bring Myself To Read It Because I Get Tired Of Hearing Those Things. But This Was Different, The Way You Wrote It Had Me Interested Even After I Realized What The Subject Was. |
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Does it help to know that every single cell in the body is constantly being replaced. The shell that was you THEN that was defiled THEN has long gone.
Your mind was not reached. It is your citadel you can make it what you want.. do noty be sad, do not be afraid, you are as perfect as the day you were born. |
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by Wrybod on
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Does it help to know that every single cell in the body is constantly being replaced. The shell that was you THEN that was defiled THEN has long gone.
Your mind was not reached. It is your citadel you can make it what you want.. Do not be sad, do not be afraid, you are as perfect as the day you were born. |
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by Desi on
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| I cried. I don't cry often. This poem is one of the best poems I have ever read in my life. On ascale of 1-10 (10 being best) I would give it a 12. Its excellant. I wish she hadn't felt pain, though. I wish no one does. |
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by etherealgurl on
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| I am stunned...this is awesome...bravo for creating a true work of art out of such painfull experience. I always say that when you are a write, misery is part of the job description...and this just proves how unfortuantely so that is |
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by CarrieLynn on
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Wow.... that is a really good poem, I am sure you know that... My mom was abused as a child and I hear her cry sometimes.... And I read this to her after I had seen it and She said to tell you it very true.... Thanks
CarrieLynn age:17
P.S. I would love for you to read some of mine..... Please and Thanks |
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by Kimmie_mac on
Sunday, 20th July 2003 @ 12:11:42 PM AEST
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WOW!!!!! So many women go through this. This is an exceptional poem. Great story.
Kimmie_mac |
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by Krazykaric on
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| Very well written! Shows a lot about how hurt a person can feel. |
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by 0o_Jelly_Bean_o0 on
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| Its very sad that a person can bring upon such pain and agony to another person without feeling guilt or shame. Its very well written just unfortunately sad. |
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by Pompous on
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| one of the best poems I've ever read. its such an amazing poem, I just feel so sad for the ppl that have to go through it |
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by Pariah on
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| Dang that was great!!! Like er my Goodness it's wondeful I loved it. I really did dang it was magnificent. |
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by Serendippitty on
Monday, 27th October 2003 @ 07:05:26 PM AEST
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This is sooo real, I hung on every word... a great and realistic write... just excellent
~*sErEnDiPPiTTy*~ |
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by JusMeOtay on
Thursday, 22nd January 2004 @ 03:49:00 PM AEST
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Damon-
Great write. Truly wonderful. I'll make sure a few of my friends see this one. Very moving.
-Jeni |
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| An impressive work of art. A true commentary on a horrific experience. But so vivid so close to home and well executed. The poetic existance is the constant reminder and the troubled thoughts and the descriptive details. My ex-girlfriend was sodomized as a child and her story was very much like the one written here. "Broken" couldn't have said it better.... |
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by neglected1 on
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truely remarkable ... it really touched me and felt how you were feeling.. it breaks my heart though... lookin forward to reading more from you!!
great work |
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by Dina on
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| After all that has been said, I have nothing more to add, but please let me tell you that I admired your way of writing and expressing. Great Job. |
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at first i thought it would be one of those
feel sorry for me im the victim
kinda poems.
i know how very hard it is
to have gone through that
or to know someone who has.
makes you feel kinda helpless
towards them.
in any case it was an undescribable
piece of art. straight from the heart
where all art should come from.
much love to ya.
peace
babymac |
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by Former_Member on
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at first i thought it would be one of those
feel sorry for me im the victim
kinda poems.
i know how very hard it is
to have gone through that
or to know someone who has.
makes you feel kinda helpless
towards them.
in any case it was an undescribable
piece of art. straight from the heart
where all art should come from.
much love to ya.
peace
babymac |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 03:20:26 AM AEST
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at first i thought it would be one of those
feel sorry for me im the victim
kinda poems.
i know how very hard it is
to have gone through that
or to know someone who has.
makes you feel kinda helpless
towards them.
in any case it was an undescribable
piece of art. straight from the heart
where all art should come from.
much love to ya.
peace
babymac |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 03:20:27 AM AEST
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at first i thought it would be one of those
feel sorry for me im the victim
kinda poems.
i know how very hard it is
to have gone through that
or to know someone who has.
makes you feel kinda helpless
towards them.
in any case it was an undescribable
piece of art. straight from the heart
where all art should come from.
much love to ya.
peace
babymac |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 03:21:09 AM AEST
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at first i thought it would be one of those
feel sorry for me im the victim
kinda poems.
i know how very hard it is
to have gone through that
or to know someone who has.
makes you feel kinda helpless
towards them.
in any case it was an undescribable
piece of art. straight from the heart
where all art should come from.
much love to ya.
peace
babymac |
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by badlander on
Wednesday, 24th March 2004 @ 02:22:48 AM AEST
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A word painting of pure emotion. I didn't think that was possible. Great write.
tony |
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by Soulless on
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Hauntingly beautiful. I love the poem. Or lyrics, im not sure. It doesnt matter though because Ilove your unique writing style. I absolutely love this poem!!!!
mind if I book mark it?
kisses,
~Soulless~ |
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by gothicangel on
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| great poem =) |
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by mysticaldancer on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 08:34:54 PM AEST
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| It's hard to know what to say. This is a wonderful poem that grips your heart. |
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by HellsLibrarian on
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| This is one that sticks in your mind and heart, long after it's been read. Very moving, very powerful, and very well written. |
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by buchi on
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| Yup...its cool... |
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by buchi on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 08:33:39 PM AEST
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| Your poem sings to the psyche of the human personality....a completely realized summation. |
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by jmt25607 on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 09:29:35 PM AEST
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| i read your poem in tears you know exactly what it feels like and saddly to say so do i and this poem is great and i wish i could help you though this like my friends and boyfriend helped me but i cant so ood luck with all of this and i wiish for you peace this is a really great poem keep the writeing up |
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by Solnubis on
Monday, 16th August 2004 @ 12:29:49 PM AEST
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I could relate alot to the emotions of this poem and know quite well the feeling you expressed in this line:She just closes her eyes sometimes, And floats to the place where this couldn’t happen. I had to do this myself so i would not feel or know what what being done to me.
Very well written and I agree it hurts to know that this happens.>Every hour she feels the hurt inside for others like her,
Who have been and will be broken |
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by Live2Die on
Thursday, 21st October 2004 @ 03:34:57 PM AEST
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| WOW. this is really really good. All I can say is...WOW. I can't feel her pain...but I get exactly what you mean. I pray she is not the author of this poem. |
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by avanottingham on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 07:50:44 AM AEST
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This poem was great if for no other reason then it was powerful the whole way through.
The line that clutched my heart was
"An innocent girl should have nothing to hide"
That line caught me and pulled me in and then the meaning of the poem hit me so hard I nearly cried.
Now that is poetry. |
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by sunshiny on
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| Very sad and in-depth poem. It's depressing to know that this probably does happen every day. A lot of people just block it out like it doesn't. Wonderfully done...I wish I could compliment you more but I am still deep in thought on this one. Keep writing! |
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by JacobsKK on
Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 04:22:24 PM AEST
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| Wow...That's all I can say...6 out of 5, 11 out of 10, 21 outof 20. Excellent write. I loved every word, so painful yet meaningful. |
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by white_tiger on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 12:47:42 AM AEST
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that's a great poem..it has great sense of imagery. im sorry if it happened to you, but keep up the good work!!
huggs and keep smiling |
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by Sirena on
Tuesday, 12th April 2005 @ 08:13:49 PM AEST
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| You are an amazing writer. That was so real, I started crying, becuase I know someone who went through something like this. You have really captured the pain, and gried and shame. Again, I applaud you! |
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by animusutputo on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 02:35:20 PM AEST
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"Tainted inside to out,
An empty shell that mere words just cannot help.
Now she’s falling and she’s drifting,
Surrounded by burning rain,
Pained and living a life,
That she can never feel safe in again. "
Those lines really hit home for me... it is so sad that many girls.. and guys out there can really relate to this poem.. can remember when this kind of thing happened to them... i happen to be one of them..
Props to you for writing a poem that evokes so many emotions from people.. very well written. - jen |
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by O7NeVeS on
Wednesday, 8th June 2005 @ 10:18:26 PM AEST
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Wow, this really was exceptionally well done. You've managed to put my own feelings down on paper. This unfortunately has re-surfaced my own supressed memories. Excellent write.
TD |
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by brokenbutterfly on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 02:55:44 AM AEST
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i'm speechless... that poem was so melancholic... definately mad me stop and think. you could feel the girl's pain through the poem yet you don't feel anything close to it... 5 stars.
nicole |
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by AshRayne on
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Damon, words cannot express what is running in my mind. wow....just...wow. hope to see more.
exquisite writing that is your gift, be blessed, for you are perfection.
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by ChibiMiroku on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 11:03:46 PM AEST
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Wow. Thats....hot.
Really, really good. Great use of nice, short words to get your meaning across. Good going! |
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by specialangel8857 on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 02:11:55 PM AEST
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This is such a powerful poem. I was sexually abused as a child so in a way, I can relate. I have often blamed myself but now I don't. I know it's not my fault. I've put it in God's Hands and now I feel free. Love this poem!
God Bless,
~Ashley~ |
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Friday, 2nd December 2005 @ 12:13:07 PM AEST
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There are no words. This is amazing, I literally have tears in my eyes from reading this...wow.
-Jessie |
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by brokenheartsbleed on
Saturday, 3rd December 2005 @ 01:19:21 AM AEST
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| this is a great poem so much emotion and description. this pain sounds horrible. nobody should have to go through it. great write. |
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by xxbreathlessx on
Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 09:05:54 PM AEST
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| that was amazing, captivating, innovative. its....a masterpiece. great,great job!! |
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| pretty good. i didn't care much for the rhyming though. i was never a fan of it. still, i liked it. |
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Wednesday, 3rd May 2006 @ 06:57:47 PM AEST
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| Wow! This is very beautiful, I mean, it's so nice. I like how it seems so real on how people go through with something like this. I feel like I know this girl or something. It makes you kind of sad. Well, this is wonderful poem. Good job. |
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 09:41:04 AM AEST
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Powerful depiction of the ugliness and arrogance of those who break others. The most persausive argument for the death penalty for such scum! Excellent presentation.
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 19th November 2006 @ 04:55:22 PM AEST
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| This ios a very poerful and beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing it! |
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Thursday, 15th February 2007 @ 07:43:11 PM AEST
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| It happens and yet I don't think anyone has written so intensely what it must be like to the point of feeling the fear and after effects.So well done.....you will help many to open up and talk about their pain. Thank you |
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Thursday, 15th February 2007 @ 07:45:56 PM AEST
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| It happens and yet I don't think anyone has written so intensely what it must be like to the point of feeling the fear and after effects.So well done.....you will help many to open up and talk about their pain. Thank you |
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Saturday, 21st April 2007 @ 06:03:58 AM AEST
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| CRYING TEARS OF UNDERSTANDING YOU ARE NOT ALONE |
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Saturday, 11th October 2008 @ 07:55:36 AM AEST
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Damn.
This is gripping, and terrifying, and so, so heartbreaking. The way you portrayed this, the words you used, they way you show how she feels, it's a brilliant piece of writing. And the repetition just makes it so much worse... it really adds to the write, the atmosphere of the whole piece.
I am so sorry that people go through this sort of thing. I will never understand how people could ever do these things to one another.
Good write, once again.
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Friday, 5th December 2008 @ 03:03:34 PM AEST
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a painful read, but excellent also.
-phil |
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by brialuv on
Saturday, 19th June 2010 @ 03:57:14 PM AEST
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| sooo moving and touching im speechless ! |
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by pooper on
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| Very enjoyable read. Nice work. |
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