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Array ( [sid] => 20871 [catid] => 1 [aid] => Mick [title] => Death of... [time] => 2003-07-24 02:05:00 [hometext] => Sorry, its about the death of a soldier. The goodbye dad part is based on a true story. [bodytext] => Cold as steel but its flesh and bone
listen to you buddy moan
he cries in pain his words distorted
waiting to leave and be transpoted
to the aide station for some help
like a dog he cries and yelps
in pain and fear he cries to you
but your alone what can you do
theres nothing that you can do for him
but wait with him
and say it will all be fine
his waters empty so "here have mine"
he needs a drink but wont make it through
he will not live through the move
if he makes it to the truck
that will how he had some luck
but he wont and that is sad
hes seeing ghost "im sorry dad"
him and dad had fight before he left
he said "i wont be back" with his final breath
and now those words are coming true
as he dies there next to you
you dont know what happens next
as he gasps his final breath
he intakes blood into his lungs
and you say, "dont worry boy, its over son" [comments] => 2 [counter] => 140 [topic] => 39 [informant] => Private [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => Grief )

Death of...

Contributed by Private on Thursday, 24th July 2003 @ 02:05:00 AM in AEST
Topic: Grief

Cold as steel but its flesh and bone
listen to you buddy moan
he cries in pain his words distorted
waiting to leave and be transpoted
to the aide station for some help
like a dog he cries and yelps
in pain and fear he cries to you
but your alone what can you do
theres nothing that you can do for him
but wait with him
and say it will all be fine
his waters empty so "here have mine"
he needs a drink but wont make it through
he will not live through the move
if he makes it to the truck
that will how he had some luck
but he wont and that is sad
hes seeing ghost "im sorry dad"
him and dad had fight before he left
he said "i wont be back" with his final breath
and now those words are coming true
as he dies there next to you
you dont know what happens next
as he gasps his final breath
he intakes blood into his lungs
and you say, "dont worry boy, its over son"

Copyright © Private ... [ 2003-07-24 02:05:00]
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Re: Death of... (User Rating: 1 )
by Saira on Thursday, 24th July 2003 @ 08:46:02 AM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC Private!
Very heartfelt write. Keep on writing!
Saira

Re: Death of... (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Thursday, 24th July 2003 @ 11:29:49 AM AEST
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welcome to ypdc. I have friends and family over fighting the war as we speak and this really got to me. Heart touching write here Ill watch for more.
michelle

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