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[aid] => Mick
[title] => A Dark Secret Feeling
[time] => 2003-06-11 20:45:00
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[bodytext] => A dark secret feeling,
I just can’t explain,
Hides in my shadow,
Impossible to contain.
I can’t say where it’s from,
Or why it follows me still,
But it’s that hidden voice,
That tells me to kill.
From the back of my mind,
It whispers it’s evil deed,
Of death and horror,
That escape as I bleed.
But it’s not just in me,
It’s part of you as well,
Pulling you further,
To the depths of Hell.
Bleed as I do,
And have your pain leave,
Listen to the whispers,
And you to will believe.
In this relaxing ritual,
I hope you take part,
Let the cold black hand,
Reach for your heart.
And as it kills you slowly,
Think only of this,
Those harsh times before,
Were actually bliss.
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[counter] => 366
[topic] => 36
[informant] => hardcoreputa
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[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 31
[ratings] => 7
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Suicide
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A Dark Secret Feeling
Contributed by
hardcoreputa
on
Wednesday, 11th June 2003 @ 08:45:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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A dark secret feeling,
I just can’t explain,
Hides in my shadow,
Impossible to contain.
I can’t say where it’s from,
Or why it follows me still,
But it’s that hidden voice,
That tells me to kill.
From the back of my mind,
It whispers it’s evil deed,
Of death and horror,
That escape as I bleed.
But it’s not just in me,
It’s part of you as well,
Pulling you further,
To the depths of Hell.
Bleed as I do,
And have your pain leave,
Listen to the whispers,
And you to will believe.
In this relaxing ritual,
I hope you take part,
Let the cold black hand,
Reach for your heart.
And as it kills you slowly,
Think only of this,
Those harsh times before,
Were actually bliss.
Copyright ©
hardcoreputa
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2003-06-11 20:45:00]
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by Ilhar on
Wednesday, 11th June 2003 @ 09:20:57 PM AEST
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well writen, truthfully it scared me a little
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by deadly_blaZe on
Wednesday, 11th June 2003 @ 09:54:54 PM AEST
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:D i loved it!
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by MX on
Wednesday, 11th June 2003 @ 11:04:47 PM AEST
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| that sent chills down my spine....scary. very good poem.
-MX- |
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 11th June 2003 @ 11:51:38 PM AEST
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Really dark...but interesting....
Jenni |
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by BlackFire9786 on
Thursday, 12th June 2003 @ 12:07:56 AM AEST
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| Wow, a great poem, beautiful but dark.....the really scary thing is i can relate! (i was suicidal a few years ago) Great write! luv ya lotz-Lisa |
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by shelby on
Thursday, 12th June 2003 @ 02:51:57 AM AEST
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OHHHHHHHH this is a bit spooky to me but a great write just the same.
Michelle |
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by MoonlitAngel on
Thursday, 12th June 2003 @ 05:25:52 AM AEST
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Good point.
~ Moonlit |
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by M on
Thursday, 12th June 2003 @ 11:40:12 AM AEST
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| Dark and beautiful. So true. |
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by hardcoreputa on
Friday, 13th June 2003 @ 10:41:56 AM AEST
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| thanx for all the comments... its one of my favorite poems i've written |
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 13th June 2003 @ 02:31:18 PM AEST
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| dearest apryl, you have a flare for dark poetry, your talent comes clearly through in this well laid out flowing poem; i don't need to cut myself, i am always falling over dog buckets and stuff, and no longer think of death as bliss as you well know; your voice needs to be heard and is well worth listening to, much happiness and beauty to you, hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by Cancer on
Saturday, 14th June 2003 @ 01:33:03 AM AEST
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that blew me away. like a sinful secret, it just creeps inside and grabs you. i loved it
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by Butterat_Zool on
Friday, 27th June 2003 @ 07:04:41 PM AEST
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| I really loved this piece. My favorite line was when you called suicide a "relaxing ritual". Those are very powerful words for a very powerful urge. keep writing. Butterat Zool. |
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Re: A Dark Secret Feeling
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by Butterat_Zool on
Friday, 27th June 2003 @ 07:06:34 PM AEST
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| I really loved this piece. My favorite line was when you called suicide a "relaxing ritual". Those are very powerful words for a very powerful urge. keep writing. Butterat Zool. |
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