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[aid] => mick
[title] => Shots Fired
[time] => 2015-07-16 15:47:36
[hometext] => Bim bam boom.
[bodytext] => Stand back I got this
Duck down and take cover
Lips aimed to take kiss
From an unfit lover
Your future is bright-
The end of a tunnel
A dimly lit light;
Hollow like a funnel
Sit up and take note:
The noose is tied to hopes
Signed; Murder She Wrote
Now you must learn the ropes.
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[informant] => hauntedscorp
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Shots Fired
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hauntedscorp
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Thursday, 16th July 2015 @ 03:47:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Stand back I got this
Duck down and take cover
Lips aimed to take kiss
From an unfit lover
Your future is bright-
The end of a tunnel
A dimly lit light;
Hollow like a funnel
Sit up and take note:
The noose is tied to hopes
Signed; Murder She Wrote
Now you must learn the ropes.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2015-07-16 15:47:36]
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Re: Shots Fired
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by speedy on
Thursday, 16th July 2015 @ 07:47:09 PM AEST
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Great write.
Hannah B |
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Re: Shots Fired
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by irisblue on
Thursday, 16th July 2015 @ 08:22:35 PM AEST
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| brilliant write! |
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Re: Shots Fired
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by JamesStockdale on
Friday, 17th July 2015 @ 11:06:48 AM AEST
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| I get it. Great! |
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Re: Shots Fired
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th July 2015 @ 11:25:47 AM AEST
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Not only did you say bim bam boom, you wrote a poem!!!!!!!!!!
I love the way you started this. Oh so cool! It's like let someone who knows what they're doing take control. Not sure if I get the rest but that no matter to me. I still like it and was happy to see you posted a poem.
So much better to see talent over 600+ pieces of spam.
Thankies.
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Re: Shots Fired
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 17th July 2015 @ 02:48:50 PM AEST
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i admit i am confused, the beginning seems political, the
middle like someone is dying and the ending is sad with
inspiration, so happy to see you writing again!
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Shots Fired
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by Invierno on
Friday, 17th July 2015 @ 07:20:14 PM AEST
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Very cool in a way I don' t have the clock time to fully examine. I'll revisit.
I like it.
Invierno |
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Re: Shots Fired
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by softerware on
Friday, 17th July 2015 @ 08:44:04 PM AEST
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This little work keeps starting itself over!
Every two lines it morphs into something else entirely. The challenge is to find a common denominator, but since your write is far from common… I am happy to dance across the endless beginnings, bereft of closure, knowing that one of us knows what we are saying!
softerware |
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Re: Shots Fired
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 18th July 2015 @ 09:56:01 AM AEST
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I am still in love with that very first line!!!!
And now I got meaning out of it. Woo-hoo, I aint completely brain dead!
It made me think of one of my X's for some reason.
Bimmity bammity boomy |
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Re: Shots Fired
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 18th July 2015 @ 03:36:39 PM AEST
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Ever seen an eastern dude shout through a rope? There'll be no hanging in my territory!
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Re: Shots Fired
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 25th July 2015 @ 04:33:17 PM AEST
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How you do it and keep on doing it I will never know.
In awe once again.
Treasure your gift, for you truly have it.
What more can I add?
Steve |
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Re: Shots Fired
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by Jigget on
Tuesday, 29th November 2016 @ 01:33:20 AM AEST
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i chose this one at random, and it most certainly did not disappoint. i really like this quick switchblade of a gnashed grin.
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