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Over Water
Contributed by
spike
on
Sunday, 25th January 2015 @ 07:02:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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over water
under sea
across the waves,
come rescue me
beneath the clouds
across the sky
on cooling breeze,
catch my sigh
emancipate
liberate
confiscate
my heart
across the sky
beneath the sea
through restless winds,
come rescue me.
Copyright ©
spike
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2015-01-25 07:02:59] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Over Water
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 25th January 2015 @ 08:44:42 AM AEST (User
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Yes! Yes! I agree...come rescue me. Love it. |
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Re: Over Water
(User Rating: 1 ) by JamesStockdale on
Sunday, 25th January 2015 @ 08:59:46 AM AEST (User
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I like this style
Brief and with great flow
Don't study it and rework it 50 times- think and pen it.
It works and its great.
Superb! |
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Re: Over Water
(User Rating: 1 ) by kmec1990 on
Sunday, 25th January 2015 @ 05:17:22 PM AEST (User
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I too love this and I agree with James it just flows, excellent!
Thanks for sharing
K |
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Re: Over Water
(User Rating: 1 ) by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 30th January 2015 @ 02:06:21 PM AEST (User
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Short and snappy, sharp as a dagger.
Point well made, you say what needs to be said without over indulgence.
As "too many cooks spoil the broth sometimes", too many words can spoil the poem.
You've avoided that
Steve |
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Re: Over Water
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 17th February 2015 @ 08:39:27 AM AEST (User
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poetry at its finest, perfect beauty here,
hugs n' love nessa
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