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[title] => Rhyme Jr.
[time] => 2014-11-08 23:44:55
[hometext] => Well, this is a first! What do you think?
[bodytext] => On this earth lives a family in this spot
Just two tiny lives, no bigger than a dot
Here, in a place, where everything is awesome
*Huge grin* ...Your first smiley face picture...awe, son.
I got sidetracked, what was your question again?
Umm, say what. "Am I trained in the art of zen?"
Son; I must be excused, you have me confused
I don't know my taekwondo from Ninjago
I'm sorry, what. "Do I prefer Kai, or Zane?"
Who are they. I grew up on Batman and Bane
"Who is stronger?" Charizard, or Pikachu-
What on earth? How much does that cost...Pikawho?
Oh my. A list for Santa, started so soon?
It's only Boxing day, and it's barely noon...
Well, you have a lot of being good to do
Pardon me? Okay smarty pants. I do, too.
Dear God. "Where do babies come from?"
"Charlie said I came out your bum".
"When can I try a piece of gum?"
But...Mom. Mom. Mom. Mom. Mom. Mom. Mom.
**Author's note: This is my first poem attempt with my son. He is a rhyme and poetry lover like me. I asked for some words and themes to work with. He gave me:
Words: spot/dot, Zane/Bane, Charlie, Batman, taekwondo
Themes: Lego, Pokemon, "us", drawing pictures, "ask a question".
Thanks for the inspiration, big dude.
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Rhyme Jr.
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Saturday, 8th November 2014 @ 11:44:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
ChildrensPoetry
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On this earth lives a family in this spot
Just two tiny lives, no bigger than a dot
Here, in a place, where everything is awesome
*Huge grin* ...Your first smiley face picture...awe, son.
I got sidetracked, what was your question again?
Umm, say what. "Am I trained in the art of zen?"
Son; I must be excused, you have me confused
I don't know my taekwondo from Ninjago
I'm sorry, what. "Do I prefer Kai, or Zane?"
Who are they. I grew up on Batman and Bane
"Who is stronger?" Charizard, or Pikachu-
What on earth? How much does that cost...Pikawho?
Oh my. A list for Santa, started so soon?
It's only Boxing day, and it's barely noon...
Well, you have a lot of being good to do
Pardon me? Okay smarty pants. I do, too.
Dear God. "Where do babies come from?"
"Charlie said I came out your bum".
"When can I try a piece of gum?"
But...Mom. Mom. Mom. Mom. Mom. Mom. Mom.
**Author's note: This is my first poem attempt with my son. He is a rhyme and poetry lover like me. I asked for some words and themes to work with. He gave me:
Words: spot/dot, Zane/Bane, Charlie, Batman, taekwondo
Themes: Lego, Pokemon, "us", drawing pictures, "ask a question".
Thanks for the inspiration, big dude.
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Re: Rhyme Jr.
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by softerware on
Saturday, 8th November 2014 @ 11:52:24 PM AEST
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what an amazing way to write a poem! I couldn't have made a salad with those words! How clever!
Random, sand em, rhyme in tandem!
Cute and funny, you have captured the essence of the child speak…all over the place and all at once!
Marvelous! and hats off to parents everywhere! I'm exhausted just reading along!
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Re: Rhyme Jr.
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th November 2014 @ 12:03:05 AM AEST
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got to say, reading this that it brings back the best memories I had with my first born son...
reading all the time together, think we borrowed all there was in children's book in the public library, really I mean that... I think it pays off, but careful now, there's this fuzzy thing called teenagers, when the poetry stops, and well, at least in my house, for a time at least, he closed up and thought I was a big zero...
wow, that time doth pass but it hurts the soul.
Anyhow, Scorp I imagine your Jr will someday be writing poetry somehow!
Peace! |
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Re: Rhyme Jr.
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Sunday, 9th November 2014 @ 12:04:38 AM AEST
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Son; I must be excused, you have me confused
I don't know my taekwondo from Ninjago
You are a great mom, I loved this poem so much. what a great tribute to your son. Very very good Scorp. but shouldn't he be in bed, lol
My kids love Ninjago, btw. they are always telling me about it and I just nod my head and say uhuh. I have no idea what they are talking about. perhaps I should check it out |
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Re: Rhyme Jr.
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by sanders on
Sunday, 9th November 2014 @ 08:39:09 AM AEST
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This is really so sweet...
A poem written just the way a young kid would like
Very nice Scorp..
Best wishes for your son. |
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Re: Rhyme Jr.
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th November 2014 @ 05:07:41 PM AEST
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| All I've got is awesome and a huge smile. Loved it!!!!!!!!!! |
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Re: Rhyme Jr.
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 10th November 2014 @ 10:37:25 AM AEST
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so much more adorable 'cause you wrote together, it
is creative and clever and has a zing, beautiful!!
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Rhyme Jr.
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by Jigget on
Sunday, 14th December 2014 @ 06:30:03 AM AEST
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i enjoyed this poem. quite a bit...at first, i didn't, for the ending threw me. its the origin of this poem i enjoy, for the learning of why you wrote and how you writ this poem makes it a MUCH more enjoyable read a second time.
excellent title, too. |
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Re: Rhyme Jr.
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th February 2015 @ 01:15:18 AM AEST
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I just had to read this again. It's one of those poems that if you need a guaranteed laugh, giggle, and cheek hurting smile, this is where you come to.
Thankies!!!! |
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