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Lost
Contributed by
Wildone78
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Monday, 26th May 2014 @ 12:36:17 AM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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I am here, but I am gone
I've lost myself, and can't get home
No one is with me, but I'm not alone
So if you find me, will you take me home?
Lost out here with, no where to go
My mind is going fast, but I am going slow
I don't know how I got here, but I know I need to go
So help me fix this mess, before I lose control.
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2014-05-26 00:36:17] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Lost
(User Rating: 1 ) by reprobate on
Monday, 26th May 2014 @ 01:29:02 AM AEST (User
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I understand completely. I have stood in front of a mirror and wanted that person to reach out and choke me if he couldn't help me.
That was then. Hopefully this is yours, also.
Great job with this
Thanks for sharing... |
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Re: Lost
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th May 2014 @ 03:38:05 AM AEST (User
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you aren't alone you know
before you lose control
in the center of the mess
is where we all are
feeling completely alone
all of us everyone different trying
to define something simple like a home.
I really am lost looking for not just home
sometimes I'm looking for just a definition
of what a home could be.
Honesty in this piece stands out.
you're already in my home.
Peace!
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Re: Lost
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Monday, 26th May 2014 @ 10:00:52 AM AEST (User
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first of all warm welcome to ypdc:) your poem is
written beautifully and shows the loneliness of
drug addiction so clearly, lost inside one's own
head, you are right also in your note about
without going through it you {we} wouldn't be the
person you are today, keep writing! i look forward
to more from you,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Lost
(User Rating: 1 ) by Invierno on
Monday, 26th May 2014 @ 05:49:46 PM AEST (User
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I hope you come back and read these comments.
Good poem. I'm glad to see your acknowledgement above the poem (more important than the poem itself), "But without going through it all. I wouldn't be the person I am today."
Best and keep writing. You have a decent grasp of arrangement and flow. Your turns of phrase are quite good.."My mind is going fast, but I am going slow".
Best,
Invierno
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Re: Lost
(User Rating: 1 ) by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 30th May 2014 @ 05:31:03 PM AEST (User
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Life teaches us through experience. Without it we are nothing, so good or bad all add to the melting pot that shapes who we are and who we become.
I hope you have gained strength from everything you have gone through on the journey.
Steve |
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