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By the stillness of your qualming breeze

my helpless wingstrokes surrendered in peace.

How warm and consulting it was

to rest and recover in your arms!

No words may be told

no sorrow be sold

that carries a truth

rebacking our youth.

But when closing my eyes now

and imaging your face how,

in all of my dreams

I will long for that breeze.

From now on those wingstrokes will call

and brooklets of teardrops will fall

to qualm and release me,

all sorrow in vain,

set everything free

that causes my pain.

Let me thank you my true friend,

so graceful of your tender hand,

that touched me for quitening,

now remaining less frightening.

Whenever sparkling winds blow,

and rivers of humming tears flow,

our soal and our heart,

will never be apart.

So can we break through the last remaining chain :

When time has come will you do it again ?
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Can we break the chain

Contributed by poet0815 on Thursday, 6th October 2011 @ 08:39:46 AM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry

Can we break the chain ?

By the stillness of your qualming breeze

my helpless wingstrokes surrendered in peace.

How warm and consulting it was

to rest and recover in your arms!

No words may be told

no sorrow be sold

that carries a truth

rebacking our youth.

But when closing my eyes now

and imaging your face how,

in all of my dreams

I will long for that breeze.

From now on those wingstrokes will call

and brooklets of teardrops will fall

to qualm and release me,

all sorrow in vain,

set everything free

that causes my pain.

Let me thank you my true friend,

so graceful of your tender hand,

that touched me for quitening,

now remaining less frightening.

Whenever sparkling winds blow,

and rivers of humming tears flow,

our soal and our heart,

will never be apart.

So can we break through the last remaining chain :

When time has come will you do it again ?

Copyright © poet0815 ... [ 2011-10-06 08:39:46]
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Re: Can we break the chain (User Rating: 1 )
by FlintHunter on Thursday, 6th October 2011 @ 09:46:26 AM AEST
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'Can we break the chain' is a good poem, but I want to try to answer your question about English. There are some mistakes. Some of them are grammatical and some are related to vocabulary; I suspect that you are using a 'spell-checker,' and it is suggesting to you words which are wrong. I will show you an example:

By the stillness of your qualming breeze
QUALMING should be CALMING

my helpless wingstrokes surrendered in peace.
GOOD

How warm and consulting it was
CONSULTING should be COMFORTING

to rest and recover in your arms!
GOOD

English is a difficult language, but it is a very expressive one. Keep learning. My advice is NOT to rely on the spell-check -- since it suggests words which you think are the words you want -- but these are not the words you want. Trust yourself more. It would be good if you had a well-educated native English speaker to edit your writing. But don't give up. You will get there! Good work.

--FlintHunter

Contributed by poet0815 on Thursday, October 06 2011 @ 08:39:46 AEST
Topic: Emotional Poetry

Re: Can we break the chain (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Thursday, 6th October 2011 @ 10:20:59 AM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC.
Your writing is awesome.
Very touching.
Huggs, blessings,
emy

Re: Can we break the chain (User Rating: 1 )
by deusdeira on Friday, 7th October 2011 @ 12:49:57 AM AEST
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I'm not gonna lie... that was a way better poem than most of my English speaking friends can write. :P There were a few grammar errors... but you did great! Nice work!

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