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[aid] => mick
[title] => ARK ANIMAL CAGED
[time] => 2011-10-02 19:08:22
[hometext] => hi, this is a poem i wrote about things i see happening within our society, about the wrongs being perpetrated by the few to the many.
[bodytext] => Ark animal caged
planetary zoo.
disengaged soul
awoken by who?
Eye Noahs hark,
the herald angels sing,
gloria glory to the new born king,
message, listen, creator renew,
illuminate new life,
Kings unto you.
creation unshackled ,unchained,
human race, Noahs ark, data base,
white rabbit run, cant be late,
run straight to the important date,
where your destiny's written in slate.
time waits for no man,
but fate waits for Gods lamb in heaven
with wide open gates.
weary, bleary and teary eyed,
enlightened enraged
am i here? have i died?
three bars i see, i see, i see,
transparent, transpired, trinity, iniquity?
required, desired, retired within me.
the father,the sun
and the holy ghost,
my keeper soul reaper prison WAR = DEN
and host.
where now the ring master, die caster
of clay and plaster?
he runs now much faster
as my eye Alice tumbles after,
to underland? Wonderland? Understand?.
Underhand, slight of hand
fools the FREEMAN,
God given rites
sacrificed ,
decieved
not by
christ.
.
See MONSTER
Sea MONSTER
not law of land,
black MAGICK?
black LAW?
man ? beast? priest?
forehead, palm of hand.
[comments] => 5
[counter] => 424
[topic] => 4
[informant] => alicewhite
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ARK ANIMAL CAGED
Contributed by
alicewhite
on
Sunday, 2nd October 2011 @ 07:08:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Ark animal caged
planetary zoo.
disengaged soul
awoken by who?
Eye Noahs hark,
the herald angels sing,
gloria glory to the new born king,
message, listen, creator renew,
illuminate new life,
Kings unto you.
creation unshackled ,unchained,
human race, Noahs ark, data base,
white rabbit run, cant be late,
run straight to the important date,
where your destiny's written in slate.
time waits for no man,
but fate waits for Gods lamb in heaven
with wide open gates.
weary, bleary and teary eyed,
enlightened enraged
am i here? have i died?
three bars i see, i see, i see,
transparent, transpired, trinity, iniquity?
required, desired, retired within me.
the father,the sun
and the holy ghost,
my keeper soul reaper prison WAR = DEN
and host.
where now the ring master, die caster
of clay and plaster?
he runs now much faster
as my eye Alice tumbles after,
to underland? Wonderland? Understand?.
Underhand, slight of hand
fools the FREEMAN,
God given rites
sacrificed ,
decieved
not by
christ.
.
See MONSTER
Sea MONSTER
not law of land,
black MAGICK?
black LAW?
man ? beast? priest?
forehead, palm of hand.
Copyright ©
alicewhite
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2011-10-02 19:08:22]
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Re: ARK ANIMAL CAGED
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by FlintHunter on
Saturday, 15th October 2011 @ 06:45:25 AM AEST
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I very much enjoyed reading your poem, 'ARK ANIMAL CAGED.' The words flow. The poem itself has a musical sound to it. I am particularly interested in your free-associative -- or echoic -- technique. I don't think I've ever before read a poem that makes such use of that technique, and i urge you to follow that path. It may very well become a hallmark of your poetry -- and a darn good one at that. How easy is originality -- at times! Very good poem. Absorbing. Curious. Technically unique. Allusions used clearly and consciously! Please continue to write; please develop further the special methods you use here. These, to me, seem your own. Thanks for an unusual poem that has grace, power, and singularity.
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Re: ARK ANIMAL CAGED
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by Voyager on
Sunday, 23rd October 2011 @ 08:49:03 AM AEST
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| Wow! Brilliant! There was a continuity and a reverberation through....one lead to the other....lot of cryptic words...deep multi-layered significances which I can sory of guess what they alluded to but I suppose only you know the real significance behind some of the symbolism. There was always a sense of breaking through, breaking free, breaking the shackles....a yearning for liberation and empowerment to which I can truly relate. |
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Re: ARK ANIMAL CAGED
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by Voyager on
Sunday, 23rd October 2011 @ 08:50:14 AM AEST
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And a Killer finish to go with it!
he runs now much faster
as my eye Alice tumbles after,
to underland? Wonderland? Understand?.
Underhand, slight of hand
fools the FREEMAN,
God given rites
sacrificed ,
decieved
not by
christ.
.
See MONSTER
Sea MONSTER
not law of land,
black MAGICK?
black LAW?
man ? beast? priest?
forehead, palm of hand. |
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Re: ARK ANIMAL CAGED
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by hray42 on
Saturday, 3rd March 2012 @ 06:52:40 PM AEST
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| This is good work too.. |
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Re: ARK ANIMAL CAGED
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by purplestary on
Saturday, 17th March 2012 @ 07:40:37 PM AEST
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| this poem has so much depth that i know that i will never be able to see it all but what i could take from it was absolutely astounding. i have never read anything quit like the way you write, and it is so refreshing, and i would say it all flows so well, but your works are beyond just flowing well, they are like beautiful storms, the words like raindrops, and each meaning behind every line is like a strike of lightning followed by the loudest roll of thunder. i also found the end line quite whimsical too..i found myself actually putting the palm of my hand to my forehead simply because it was such a ride and slapping my forehead was like a wake up to try to come out of a "word induced coma."..lol. it really did suck me in that much. |
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