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Array ( [sid] => 165558 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Hollow stars [time] => 2011-03-30 09:52:06 [hometext] => comments welcomed. [bodytext] => at night i look up
stare at the stars
how similar we are
yet they are so far

putting off this light
but most are dead
yet we see life
nothing of a soul left

i wear this smile
but its only a mask
inside is hollow
i fake every task

every laugh and smile
is forced from within
muscles and sounds just form
when did this begin

maybe when i loved
and dropped on my knees
when i took her away
and asked to marry me

maybe when i became
not good enough
i saw it in her eyes
then everything became rough

i left her
destroyed my heart
but it had to be done
a new pain began to start

over time i couldn't feel
my emotions were numb
no were to escape
no were to run

now i'm just a star
dead and bright
nothing left of me
except this light

[comments] => 2 [counter] => 245 [topic] => 32 [informant] => bigj [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 10 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => SadPoetry )

Hollow stars

Contributed by bigj on Wednesday, 30th March 2011 @ 09:52:06 AM in AEST
Topic: SadPoetry

at night i look up
stare at the stars
how similar we are
yet they are so far

putting off this light
but most are dead
yet we see life
nothing of a soul left

i wear this smile
but its only a mask
inside is hollow
i fake every task

every laugh and smile
is forced from within
muscles and sounds just form
when did this begin

maybe when i loved
and dropped on my knees
when i took her away
and asked to marry me

maybe when i became
not good enough
i saw it in her eyes
then everything became rough

i left her
destroyed my heart
but it had to be done
a new pain began to start

over time i couldn't feel
my emotions were numb
no were to escape
no were to run

now i'm just a star
dead and bright
nothing left of me
except this light

Copyright © bigj ... [ 2011-03-30 09:52:06]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Hollow stars (User Rating: 1 )
by cashfan1 on Wednesday, 30th March 2011 @ 10:39:16 AM AEST
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Well done. This is a fine piece of writing, free flowing with a nice rhyming pattern. Thanks for sharing.

Re: Hollow stars (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Thursday, 31st March 2011 @ 12:05:33 AM AEST
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Well ,
I luved it especially the last 2 lines.
Awesome.
Huggs, blessings,
emy

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