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September Nights
Contributed by
whitt
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Sunday, 28th November 2010 @ 02:57:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Candels and stars may light up the night
But your deep hazel eyes shine so bright.
Butterflies soar within my beating heart
Oh how ive dreamt of this magical part.
Ive always longed for you with me
My heart is locked and you hold the key.
Frogs and crickets form the symphony
The hooting owls have become giggly.
A low, swift breeze blows near
You give me chills whispering in my ear.
While your touch warms my hips
I feel the smooth brush of your lips.
For you im head over heels
I cherish the way it feels.
You've got my head in the clouds
My thoughts of you overcrowds.
Caress me through the nightfall
The passion you give is my downfall.
Our love sways to the soft tune
The only witness is the september moon.
This love montage has just begun
I want you till the rising sun.
This romantic night is my love song
I cant stop the feeling to hum along.
Its sad to know this is all a dream
Fooling me was the joker's scheme.
This repeating dream is my fantasy
As i awake to this excruciating reality.
Copyright ©
whitt
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2010-11-28 14:57:21] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: September Nights
(User Rating: 1 ) by DukeW on
Sunday, 28th November 2010 @ 04:04:05 PM AEST (User
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Very well written, but beside that i think that the last stanza is the one that makes this poem brilliant, because a lot of us has probably felt something like that at one point or another. |
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Re: September Nights
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Sunday, 28th November 2010 @ 11:53:29 PM AEST (User
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Wouldn't you know it, all the good parts are fantasy?
Great writing.
Luved it,
Blessings,
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Re: September Nights
(User Rating: 1 ) by cashfan1 on
Tuesday, 30th November 2010 @ 02:10:09 AM AEST (User
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This brilliantly written, well thought out and beautifully executed. Well done, thanks for sharing. |
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Re: September Nights
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fern on
Tuesday, 30th November 2010 @ 06:18:29 AM AEST (User
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Your beautiful and exhilarating poem had me completely fooled until the final verse. How sad...for this to be all a dream...not a reality. Oh my. I do hope your dream comes true for you someday. I do know this much...you are gifted! You can write lovely, sensuous, breathtakingly beautiful poetry. That's clear. You must keep writing. Build an eager audience...I want a front row seat!! |
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Re: September Nights
(User Rating: 1 ) by Nonefound on
Wednesday, 1st December 2010 @ 11:18:57 PM AEST (User
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so beautiful,love it. |
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