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Progeny
Contributed by
spike
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Sunday, 28th November 2010 @ 02:11:39 AM in AEST
Topic:
poets
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here, in your head
waiting to be thought
curled in your breast
ready to beat,
to beat, to beat
on your lips,
longing to be spoken
ah/me/ma
but unborn, less than
token.
Copyright ©
spike
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2010-11-28 02:11:39] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Progeny
(User Rating: 1 ) by duff on
Sunday, 28th November 2010 @ 06:28:31 AM AEST (User
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Man, I really enjoyed this. The opening is fantastic with how something so special is a thought buried deep inside that will blossom wildly when that moment of magic arrives. Creative and refreshing. Well done.
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Re: Progeny
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 12:12:16 AM AEST (User
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Awesome.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Progeny
(User Rating: 1 ) by deusdeira on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 01:08:47 AM AEST (User
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interesting, i like it. |
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Re: Progeny
(User Rating: 1 ) by ming on
Wednesday, 1st December 2010 @ 09:54:56 AM AEST (User
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My favorite line. The end was off for me...:)
'on your lips,
longing to be spoken
ah/me/ma'
ming |
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Re: Progeny
(User Rating: 1 ) by Nazmythian on
Friday, 3rd December 2010 @ 01:43:52 AM AEST (User
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"but unborn, less than
token..."
I wonder, how many thoughts a day... are aborted. How much we wish to speak... goes unspoken? I like the simplicity, and the thoughts it invokes.
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Re: Progeny
(User Rating: 1 ) by Room214 on
Sunday, 31st July 2011 @ 05:50:21 PM AEST (User
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You had me with the title really. This... just leaves me aching. I want to say 'I'm sorry' - even, if I don't know exactly why.
Heart-tugging........
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