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my reminder remains. . .
Contributed by
elle
on
Thursday, 26th August 2010 @ 07:24:05 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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there are ghosts, lost, in your eyes. . .
arriving, in timely fashion, or exisisting ever-more. . .
arriving. . . to denude the complexity of staunch reflections
awash in the other worldy colour & glint of words
lost. . .
as lost as you,
arrhythmic bearer of amputated tears
. . .you've cut them out
bare-boned,
from among the pondering
vessels
deveined, free-falling to puddle near nonsense
as immortal as the artful. . .
as vigilant as the artless. . . the less than full sepulcher
that exudes ripe thoughts & wayward notions
with the stubbornness of wings
availibility, omnipresent & oppressive.
with the caressing nature of shadow
the composition befitting such vulnerability
evolving so profane.
Copyright ©
elle
... [
2010-08-26 07:24:05] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: my reminder remains. . .
(User Rating: 1 ) by ming on
Thursday, 26th August 2010 @ 08:31:56 AM AEST (User
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Love this , as I do most all your writes. Here is the line I wished was mine. LOL! Really though great read.
'as immortal as the artful. . .
as vigilant as the artless. . .
ming |
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Re: my reminder remains. . .
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th August 2010 @ 12:49:43 AM AEST (User
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there are ghosts, lost, in your eyes. . .
And you keep my head spinning from that point forward!
Wowness! ! !
Tim
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Re: my reminder remains. . .
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th August 2010 @ 02:41:20 AM AEST (User
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Great stuff. I just HAVE to past this stanza, it was a stunner:
'lost. . .
as lost as you,
arrhythmic bearer of amputated tears
. . .you've cut them out
bare-boned,
from among the pondering
vessels
deveined, free-falling to puddle near nonsense'
I've recently hit a crisis in my poetry, and I can't figure out why my poetry's been going downhill. This is a reminder of what great poetry is like.
-Phil
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Re: my reminder remains. . .
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 9th September 2010 @ 11:47:52 AM AEST (User
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I really liked this. |
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