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Array ( [sid] => 161356 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Beat the Odds [time] => 2010-07-24 10:26:45 [hometext] => Ever feel so low you didn't think you could make it back up? Well, I'm here to tell you, you can. [bodytext] => A petty line-up of a thousand suspects
defiantly alone, this one's circumspect
In soul-crushing blows, the finger can direct

With puffs of angst, smouldered till vaporized
faulty organs- must dissect and analyze
Racing for first, don't accept a compromise

Devilry cripples that which cannot be named
those tricks up your sleeve keep shifting the blame
Stop picking the bones of the corpse that you maimed

A crash test dummy for explosive scenes
stranger to enemy; skip the inbetweens
Never again! Submerged by any means

On that night I believe I briefly died
against my will, I was dutifully revived
Much to your dismay I not only lived...

(I thrived). [comments] => 5 [counter] => 583 [topic] => 61 [informant] => hauntedscorp [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => selfstruggles )
Beat the Odds

Contributed by hauntedscorp on Saturday, 24th July 2010 @ 10:26:45 AM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles



A petty line-up of a thousand suspects
defiantly alone, this one's circumspect
In soul-crushing blows, the finger can direct

With puffs of angst, smouldered till vaporized
faulty organs- must dissect and analyze
Racing for first, don't accept a compromise

Devilry cripples that which cannot be named
those tricks up your sleeve keep shifting the blame
Stop picking the bones of the corpse that you maimed

A crash test dummy for explosive scenes
stranger to enemy; skip the inbetweens
Never again! Submerged by any means

On that night I believe I briefly died
against my will, I was dutifully revived
Much to your dismay I not only lived...

(I thrived).



Copyright © hauntedscorp ... [ 2010-07-24 10:26:45]
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Re: Beat the Odds (User Rating: 1 )
by Applethoughtrotten on Saturday, 24th July 2010 @ 11:47:03 AM AEST
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Good use of words. It sounds as if you are a bit like me and proud of the fact. Thank you for sharing...Apple


Re: Beat the Odds (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 25th July 2010 @ 12:21:49 AM AEST
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Okay, so I'm reading this and as I told you in a communiqué, I've had influences that total the sum of me as a poet. Now I'm thinking you're one of them there influences.

I like the way you end this (something I wonder if I picked up from you but sorry I can't pinpoint it).

I also especially like this line:

those tricks up your sleeve keep shifting the blame

This conveys a conviction and a strength here. You tell 'em, Scorpness!

Take care,

Me


Re: Beat the Odds (User Rating: 1 )
by cashfan1 on Sunday, 25th July 2010 @ 03:02:20 AM AEST
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this is very strong, a deep and well expressed piece of writing. thanks for posting.


Re: Beat the Odds (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Saturday, 10th May 2014 @ 01:52:34 PM AEST
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beautifully written, the last four lines my favorite,
such power here, such strong sense of self,

hugs n' love nessa


Re: Beat the Odds (User Rating: 1 )
by JamesStockdale on Tuesday, 20th December 2016 @ 12:30:19 PM AEST
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I echo ladyfawns comments.
Last stanza was magnificent.....

James




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