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[sid] => 16045
[catid] => 1
[aid] => Mick
[title] => Broken
[time] => 2003-04-15 16:05:00
[hometext] =>
[bodytext] => I watch you
As we tear each other apart
I don't want to stay
You don't care
But I'm still here
Still pretending
Misery lies within
When the one I love
Breaks my heart everyday
You say you love me
But deep inside I know
It's not our hearts the hold us
Ropes of a wrestling ring
Hold me down
As you take your shots at me
Break me down
After all these years
You know my weaknesses for sure
How to exploit them
I turn to walk away
But I am frozen in a trance
As I watch hate brew in your eyes
I just want to go
But I'm too stubborn to fold
Take my loss
Remaining in a building
With no foundation
You call it love
I call it hell
[comments] => 14
[counter] => 257
[topic] => 52
[informant] => karoody
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 5
[ratings] => 1
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => goodbyepoetry
)
Broken
Contributed by
karoody
on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 04:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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I watch you
As we tear each other apart
I don't want to stay
You don't care
But I'm still here
Still pretending
Misery lies within
When the one I love
Breaks my heart everyday
You say you love me
But deep inside I know
It's not our hearts the hold us
Ropes of a wrestling ring
Hold me down
As you take your shots at me
Break me down
After all these years
You know my weaknesses for sure
How to exploit them
I turn to walk away
But I am frozen in a trance
As I watch hate brew in your eyes
I just want to go
But I'm too stubborn to fold
Take my loss
Remaining in a building
With no foundation
You call it love
I call it hell
Copyright ©
karoody
... [
2003-04-15 16:05:00]
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Re: Broken
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by wyrd_faerie on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 04:19:10 PM AEST
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| this is an amazing poem...but so sad... |
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Re: Broken
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 04:24:43 PM AEST
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Awww...so sad, but a fantastic write!!!
Jenni |
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Re: Broken
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by XXXsilvervoodooXXX on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 04:33:16 PM AEST
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| i just have to say, very good. |
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Re: Broken
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 07:29:00 PM AEST
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very good write, but as previously stated very sad.
Sharon |
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Re: Broken
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 08:09:02 PM AEST
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| awww! hugs and lotsa love my friend......nessa |
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Re: Broken
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 12:44:32 AM AEST
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| fantastic .. its a great write. venkat |
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Re: Broken
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by psychopunk on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 05:28:15 PM AEST
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| Very good! I've been through something like that before. |
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Re: Broken
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by mckayla on
Thursday, 17th April 2003 @ 05:14:48 PM AEST
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wow!! kara great write! and thank you for all the comments you posted they were great to read!
kat |
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Re: Broken
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by wazarov on
Saturday, 19th April 2003 @ 11:11:13 PM AEST
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| it seems that you`ve won the round in the boxing ring,glad to read this wonderful and truthful poem |
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Re: Broken
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by WordPoet on
Monday, 21st April 2003 @ 12:24:45 PM AEST
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| Bound to hell by chains of love. The sin is his, set yourself free and find the paradise you so richly deserve. |
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Re: Broken
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by AngryPrincess on
Tuesday, 22nd April 2003 @ 02:46:57 PM AEST
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kara, i agree very much with what wordpoet said... its a terrible thing when you cant leave, but what reasons do you have to stay? you deserve what this butthole (please excuse that comment) has to offer you, look for only the best, find your perfect match and live your life happy. best wishes dear friend
Lindsey |
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Re: Broken
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by Feelin_Like_A_SadFellow on
Tuesday, 22nd April 2003 @ 03:07:47 PM AEST
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as everyone has said this is very sad and sometimes it maybe hard to read when the imagery of this abuse comes to us... its hard to leave something that can be so wonderful at times yet some evil most times... a rose i will not give to you for it pricks you i choose the gentle lily as a gift for you
-Sid |
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Re: Broken
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by karoody on
Tuesday, 22nd April 2003 @ 03:48:16 PM AEST
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| oh, thank you dear friends, i am sorry that i didn't clear this up in the notes...this is a stroy of my past...me letting go...thank you so much... |
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Re: Broken
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by stargazer on
Saturday, 10th May 2003 @ 08:43:29 PM AEST
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So sad... but so emotional. Very nicely done!
--stargazer--- Amy |
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