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An "I just want to see you"
Took a rug out from under us
To see our strings
That could never make me dance

I walked away, not from you
But wanted you to want me back
A visitor in house, never mine
Now it will never be

Why did it come to this?
For you to know courage
To dare, to defy, to hold back
The flood of doubt
That would've washed away
The mountain of me now
Follow me

I cannot make you
Horse to water, water to wine
Once you had eyes opened
Now been sleeping for countless years
Longer than I've lived

Must awaken without a kiss
To own undoing
A Hegel hug, we all had to become
What we feared most sometime
Just synthesis it all away

I can't be your Jesus, your Moses
I can't be your glue or duct tape
I can't be your live-in sheep
Your torture device test dummy

But I cannot disown you,
A mother just not right
But you tried
You tried [comments] => 3 [counter] => 213 [topic] => 23 [informant] => Chamaron [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 10 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 0 [associated] => [topicname] => FamilyPoems )

You Tried

Contributed by Chamaron on Thursday, 6th May 2010 @ 09:12:40 PM in AEST
Topic: FamilyPoems

A slow backout blur
An "I just want to see you"
Took a rug out from under us
To see our strings
That could never make me dance

I walked away, not from you
But wanted you to want me back
A visitor in house, never mine
Now it will never be

Why did it come to this?
For you to know courage
To dare, to defy, to hold back
The flood of doubt
That would've washed away
The mountain of me now
Follow me

I cannot make you
Horse to water, water to wine
Once you had eyes opened
Now been sleeping for countless years
Longer than I've lived

Must awaken without a kiss
To own undoing
A Hegel hug, we all had to become
What we feared most sometime
Just synthesis it all away

I can't be your Jesus, your Moses
I can't be your glue or duct tape
I can't be your live-in sheep
Your torture device test dummy

But I cannot disown you,
A mother just not right
But you tried
You tried

Copyright © Chamaron ... [ 2010-05-06 21:12:40]
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Re: You Tried (User Rating: 1 )
by nigmart on Friday, 7th May 2010 @ 01:08:17 AM AEST
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What a beautiful peace of poetry, breathtaking imagery. Nigmart

Re: You Tried (User Rating: 1 )
by aliopterix on Friday, 7th May 2010 @ 05:33:03 AM AEST
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Your wonderful sense of pace and change of verse is so beautiful and just overflowing with emotion. This is a very powerful write my good friend, lots of hugs, Al.

Re: You Tried (User Rating: 1 )
by Breezy on Friday, 7th May 2010 @ 08:38:07 AM AEST
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Dear friend, this was so painful to read. In all of
your work, I feel this wonderful flow of emotion
and perfectly worded expression. Even when as
melancholy as this. It's heartbreaking. Maybe
because I relate so well. Well done, C.

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