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words. . .
Contributed by
elle
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Monday, 3rd May 2010 @ 06:34:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
FamilyPoems
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I want to say I love you, Daddy.
you rumble in my heart. . .
I want
to say I love you. . .
to see your dear eyes smile
laughter sliding from your side. . .
. . . to see through the fog that sets in, on the memories I hold of you. . .
how I ran to you, whenever you came home,
& when you'd leave, I'd stand & wave long after you'd been gone.
the distance, marked by longing. . .
your gentle girl has grown.
oh, so long. . . so long ago
but I'm still in that moment. . .
I am lost inside
the remnants of your torpid self. . . a ruin. . . fallen to loss. . .
the things you taught, inadvertantly, stain or humble me, in lue of misery.
your rumble in my heart. . .
what mordant guise did wound your heart?
what hand was dealt to break?
your spirit managed to exist, but stumbled in life's wake.
what broken spark breathes madness?
what stole our peaceful days?
I want to say I loved you. . . everything about you. . .
you rumble in my heart. . .
but you are lost to me. . .
Copyright ©
elle
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2010-05-03 06:34:58]
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Re: words. . .
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by lesoleilnoire on
Monday, 3rd May 2010 @ 07:41:04 PM AEST
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This poem moved me greatly. It made me think of my relationship with my Dad and how close we used to be. Time has taken its toll on us. I almost cried at the end of your poem. I hope your Dad is okay and that you will be able to write a sequel to this poem with a happy ending. Great poem!
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Re: words. . .
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by lesoleilnoire on
Monday, 3rd May 2010 @ 07:41:53 PM AEST
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This poem moved me greatly. It made me think of my relationship with my Dad and how close we used to be. Time has taken its toll on us. I almost cried at the end of your poem. I hope your Dad is okay and that you will be able to write a sequel to this poem with a happy ending. Great poem!
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Re: words. . .
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by Breezy on
Monday, 3rd May 2010 @ 08:00:29 PM AEST
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Oh elle, this is so sad. I don't even have words to
articulate just what this piece did to me. It's so
perfect in its melancholy. Especially that last line.
This breathes with a sadness that drenches the page.
Excellent writing, elle. As always. -- Achelois
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Re: words. . .
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by pooja on
Tuesday, 4th May 2010 @ 09:53:32 AM AEST
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This a beautiful poem...
an endearing sadness rings through it...
There are many things we leave unsaid to those we care about the most
ur words put across this uncanny irony so well
well-written.Take care n God bless |
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Re: words. . .
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by LadyRose on
Wednesday, 5th May 2010 @ 11:47:25 AM AEST
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| This hits home in so many ways......beautiful write |
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Re: words. . .
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by sidneyconrad23 on
Wednesday, 10th November 2010 @ 05:37:15 AM AEST
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| Wow what a sweet write love the way you use the words always use that gift you have from God a really nice write. |
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